Published March 5, 2011
I know its not a fantastic title^^
we had a dream
of ruling
all the seven seas
the dream
was fought for
and we lost
her
the beautiful dream
the shame we brought forthe
and all
victory less
glory
the dream was
alive
again
we fought
we fought
this is war
allies from the north!
from the south!
come brothers
fight
for our glory
against the
victim less disraught
the glory we won
was shameful
and
we were sinful
oh so sinful!
that we jumped
we jumped
a great leap
of time
to the
deaths
of civilians
we fell with them
now
sorrow was unkept
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I really like this poem. But, what is it about? and what is the motive? I know I ask a lot of questions but thats how you get answers and this poem is really good, thats why I want answers. i like the way you did the stanzas. Keep writing, you are doing good. Smiles
Thought I'd help with the punctuation ^.^
Those are just the things I would do
--> good story! :3