Hey Friends...
I'm Sparrow. That's how I like to be called😇. I'm new in Young Writers' Society. Hope all the young writers are doing good and safe. I'm here to share a story. The story of a girl and a boy. The title of the story is "Hearts Afire". Hope you'll like it.
So here I begin my journey....
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Hey there!
It's nice to meet you, but publishing things is usually reserved for poetry or parts of novels/a short story. This feels more like it belongs on your wall, or maybe in your blogs tab. No worries though! Although, there isn't a way to actually review this. I'll give it a go:
Anything is a story of a girl and boy if the characters in it identify as such. I see the tags, so it is a romance. How do they meet, what are their personalities, etc? Of course, no need to give out all the key plot parts, but some info would be nice.
I can't decide if I like something just based off of the title of the story, the genre that could mean so many things, and a basic description of what their gender is. I could also get into that both boys and girls act like people, so just saying that isn't getting anywhere, as people are people; they do their own things.
Nitpick thing. "Afire" sounds a bit off to me, so something like "aflame" could fit into that better? A quick Google search can tell you if anyone has already named something that, so check that if you'd prefer.
Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here!
Best,
Max
Hello friend
I'm so happy to see your response. Actually I don't know how the title came into my mind. And I was just thinking about a change of the title. It will be updated soon. Anyways thank you so much for the suggestion dear friend.
Hiyo! Hi This is Hailey! Its nice to meet you sparrow. And I can wait for the story your gonna write. Im Using this As a before you write it Review. I think this story Is gonna be really good.
"I'm here to share a story. The story of a girl and a boy. The title of the story is "Hearts Afire"."
I think this was honestly the whole reason I wrote this because its Nice and I like that you stated it this way. So thank you. Even though this didn't need a review i gave it one because you are amazing.
Hey friend
This response means a lot to me. Thank you so much for these encouraging words. There will be a change in the title of the story and it will be updated soon.