Hey there!
It's nice to meet you, but publishing things is usually reserved for poetry or parts of novels/a short story. This feels more like it belongs on your wall, or maybe in your blogs tab. No worries though! Although, there isn't a way to actually review this. I'll give it a go:
The story of a girl and a boy.
Anything is a story of a girl and boy if the characters in it identify as such. I see the tags, so it is a romance. How do they meet, what are their personalities, etc? Of course, no need to give out all the key plot parts, but some info would be nice.
I can't decide if I like something just based off of the title of the story, the genre that could mean so many things, and a basic description of what their gender is. I could also get into that both boys and girls act like people, so just saying that isn't getting anywhere, as people are people; they do their own things.
Nitpick thing. "Afire" sounds a bit off to me, so something like "aflame" could fit into that better? A quick Google search can tell you if anyone has already named something that, so check that if you'd prefer.
Welcome to YWS! I hope you like it here!
Best,
Max
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