Published October 9, 2012
You, always had my back, from day one.
You, were always there,when I felt down.
You,were always able to give me; confidence, courage, and a sense of wisdom.
Those memories, still remain within.
I will treasure, the time we had together.
Always and forever," till the end!"
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Because of the length, the only critique I can give you would be on grammar. (I know. Boo! Grammar Nazi!)
I cannot wait to see what you write next.
I found a misplaced comma/semicolon/quotation/space in almost every line. This may have been intentional, but it was distracting. Feel free to yell at me if you disagree.
"You, were always there,( )when I felt down."
"You( )were always able to give me( )confidence, courage, and a sense of wisdom."
The comma and semicolon just cut up a sentence that is lovely without them.
"Those memories( )still remain within.
I will treasure( )the time we had together."
As far as content, it is just nice. I really liked it. Excuse my grammar picky-ness. I cannot help myself sometimes.
Neva
Seems like this person means a lot to you..We all have one those people. The person we that keeps us going everyday
this was kinda sad!