Published April 5, 2010
A reflection on my favourite statue ever, Michelangelo's Pieta - just in time for Easter.
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Once, you winged His shoulderblade;
Once, you bore a king.
Now you must hold His cold crown,
And bear the bones He starved of sin.
None may look upon you now,
A medusa in your loss.
A child's mortality, misplaced alchemy
that turns all from grace to rock.
Mothers will claim kinship in tears,
Thinkers break on your strength of faith;
Histories will map your darkness;
Gamblers ever tip prophecy or snake;
But the sculptor came closest
When he marbled your last embrace.
You, perfection vivified, mediumed
the human in god's face.
Twofold as your son, and twice create -
Once from rib and once from stone.
Madonna of rocks, Sunrise will justify
The pity you bore alone.
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i really like "bones starved of sin"
this poem has a really stony flavor, i think you could change that by adding a little more expressive language, as it stands its just a poem about a statue... but it could be more. I'm not sure everything fits exactly "misplaced alchemy?" "Gambers ever tip prophecy" It sounds cool, but it doesn't really make sense. Just some minor things.
Hey there!
I don't quite understand the part about "misplaced alchemy", though.
Great job! I thoroughly enjoyed this poem. Your allusions were subtle, too subtle at times for the average reader (for example, "Once, you winged his shoulderblade").
I absolutely loved "Now you must hold his cold crown, / And bear the bones He starved of sin." AH! I love it.
Anyways, very, very, VERY well done. I am breathtaken.
Sincerely,
S.S. Rose