Bullying-
The way you are, the way you act. Do you think its okay to treat him like that? To make him feel down and think theres nowhere and nobody around, to help him. So he keeps quiet and wont make one tiny sound. He puts on a smile, while crying inside. He feels he has to abide by your rules. Thats cruel. He wont do P.E, to cover up the bruises. You qoute ' he always looses '. He walks around with his head to ground. He says sorry, you say its not good enough! So you punch and punch, and while your doing that you yell ' TOUGH'. You call him names when he walks down the corridor, He carrys on walking and you shut the door in his face. - To make somebody feel like this is a disgrace! bullying needs to STOP. Sometimes it goes to far, and somebody like him will be sat in the dark. Scared to come out, wanting to shout. But the victim of bullying is made to think their not good enough. NOBODY SHOULD BE MADE TO FEEL THIS WAY!
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Its absolutely brilliant you bring to life a real life issue to the paper and when you show it or say it to people it really "blows the roof off the place" the descriptive language is pretty good too. Describing the character's emotions about being bullied and of how he feels so outcast-ed and of their self-esteem being torn down by the bully really brings it to life and almost jumps out of the page and into your head.
Amazing. This one really hits home tbh. Nobody should be singled out and bullied. it is cruel. Nobody should ever be made to feel they are not good enough. I will never understand how some people can be so cold to make somebody feel that way.
This is really good, really well written and highlights a lot of points associated with bullying. "But the victim of bullying is made to think their not good enough" I think that there is great because it sums up exactly how a bullying victim feels.
I think it is great that somebody has actually came on here and posted something like this, just shows that there are still people that actually have some respect for others. Absolutely great!
So I fell in love with the title. ♥ Completely agree.
I would hate to think that this comes from personal experience, but... I guess that's why it hits so hard because it could quite easily be real.
'qoute' should be 'quote'
'its' should be 'it's'
'you' should be 'you're' Just tiny little grammatical errors.
It does become a little distracting, but the content of the piece is strong enough to sustain your ideas.
With a little structure and editing. = Fantastic
Sphealwithit here..
This.is.amazing
It great what you've written. Bullying is a serious issue and it does need to stop.
Reading it actually made me really sad, not many things do that to me but Bullying is one thing I detest. I also agree with OSSUM it does take guts to post things like these. You should keep writing, you do have a talent here and that's something you should be proud of.
Keep up the good work
Sphealwithit out...
If you are being bullied. Get out there and be proud of who you are. This wont be a review, because honestly, these kind of works are perfect in any way they are written. It takes guts to put things like this anywhere and I applaud you for stepping out and reaching forward. Continue to do everything you do and I hope the two puppy dogs in your picture remain as cute as buttons for the rest of their days!
Thankyou everyone xx