I want you outta my life
never want to see your face again
I'm not your boomerang
I'm really really not your slave
want to refuse
but you'll just slap me in the face
why do you think I'm a disgrace
i just want to get this straight
and let you know
you take control of me
and I'm getting sick of it,
you never ask to leave
and you just walk out through the door
you're not the boss of me
and its getting really old
so if you don't like that
I'll lead you to the door
you take a stake and nail it to my back
that way you try to to show me I'm yours
well guess what I'm gonna
take it out
and I'll never be yours again
so let me get this straight
i never wanna bump into your face again
because...
you take control of me
and I'm getting sick of it,
you never ask to leave
and you just walk out through the door
you're not the boss of me
and its getting really old
so if you don't like like that
I'll lead you to the door
you made me give up all my dreams
and I'll never forgive you for doing that to me
now I'm just with a guilty memory
that will just haunt me
you take control of me
and I'm getting sick of it,
you never ask to leave
and you just walk out through the door
you're not the boss of me
and its getting really old
so if you don't like like that
I'll lead you to the door
do you have it straight
so i assume you'll
go right out the door
and never see my face
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it was okay. I would've changed some stuff, but that's just because I'm wierd...
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Not all songs ryhme we are planning to knida say te parts that don't ryhme. Not really rap but idk.
I think this works well with a rap background. Some of the lyrics don't really work well (e.g:I'm not your boomerang)
I dunno, probably because a boomerang isn't really human related.
to tell you the truth i've never been in a relatioship i guess i realte to my bro and outstreach it abit. It's just a song i dont hav much exciting heart breaking experiecnecs yet except the fact i've been used by some firends
well i again am not a very good writer. my first thought is that you just recently had a very ugly break up. but whut do i know. thought it was interesting when you said somthing about " you put a steak in my back" whut did he do to put said steak in said back. just a little whole here or there like that. also had a little truble following the ryming a little but i guss you dont need rymes to make a song?. still better then anything i could ever come up with. so good job!! yay!
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