Published July 4, 2009
Love is like raindrops you see.
Specks of what keeps me going through a wasteland,
like skimming two parts together
(me) till they click (the world)
And you are the click. You are where it fits together.
Sense of unfamiliar home, kindred, understood,
Little by little, tiny pieces join and uncrush, float together
Order and sense come with love. Logic, belonging.
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a love poem, thats new.
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I really love the style of verse you've used here and some of the description, but the only problem I have with it is that it doesn't come to a very clear conclusion. It's as if the end doesn't really feel like the end, like there must be another line there to summarize.
Apart from that, I think this is an excellent piece of poetry. ='D I really enjoyed it and I like the little message in it.
hey scribbling dogs here.
I really like your poem, but you need to make your theme stronger. you need a strong metaphor. also you need to make this longer. the ending really kinda just, feel short. this poem is yours to write all you want to. the show MUST go on.
I really like this and think that you should continue the good work
TuckEr EllsworTh
Hi, i got to read your love poem and i quite found it interesting. Unlike other love poems it really has got style and i love it. If you drop in another post just PM me so i can get to see it. Stay good and keep on writing. Thanks