Published May 6, 2011
It was a sunset, just a sunset
As it descended into the night.
The red and purple and yellow and gold
Scattered, in a shimmering light
I can't explain the way I felt
So buried in my strife.
I sat alone, in the cold, crisp air
I sat and thought about my life,
I found my heart, right where I left it
Cold, and dark, and sad
But when I looked at that beautiful sun
It made me realize what I had.
I had air to breath, and books to write
And stories to be told,
Most of all I have this time on earth,
I'm ambitious, intuitive and bold!
And as I watched that sun go down,
the world was mine to hold.
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Hi-ya! This really brought out a new light onto a sunset for me, brilliant writing!
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I loved the imagery of this poem. It was very descriptive and emotional. Also the flow of it was very soulful. Great job. Keep up the good work. Happy Writing