Published May 11, 2011
Tranquility, peace, clarity.
I find inside my soul.
Whenever I take a big breath
I feel serene and whole.
To think about my lungs and heart
As I breath the thin, sweet air.
To think about the wind, so strong
Running crazily through my hair.
I look around at the ants and trees
And get such inspiration.
Running into people in the hall
As I dream my poetic creations.
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hello =) I think is poem is really pretty =) I like the imagry your put in and the happiness =D My favourite line was
To think about the wind, so strong
Running crazily through my hair.
I thought it was great =] I really liked the rhyme too, it made it really flowly and interesting. I love this poem! Theres nothing wrong with it =) I really liked reading it =D
This poem was interesting, to say the least.
It seems like you wrote down really pretty pink and blue thoughts. I really enjoyed reading this. 
I adore the first line. Though, after clarity, there should be a comma instead of a period, seeing as you continue the sentence into the next line. The last two lines were really awesome, as well.
I love this stanza. You wrote it very well, and it seems like there's some kind of innocence in it. I love it.
Poetic creations is a very interesting way to put ideas, or even day dreams. I also love the way you talk about how peaceful and inspirational nature is. The last two lines show just how much of a day dreamer the person this poem is describing is.
My goodness I love this poem. It's simplicity and language is great.
The only suggestion I have is to revise some lines to help the flow and add some more fitting vocabulary. Other than that, I have no suggestions. Thanks for the read!
So, I just read like three of your poems, and I'm pretty sure you've been looking inside my head and describing what you see. Haha
I can relate so much to your writing, especially this one. It's really beautiful and your imagery is lovely.
And that's all the suggestions I have. I really love this poem! I walk into people all the time because my mind is elsewhere. Hehe
Nice work! Kepp it up.
-Em