Hey, EverWinter here to review your poem!
You have a great style and your word choice is great. The different fonts are screwing with me though. Formatting problems.
The other thing, you could really expand on this poem by stating why this person deserves the happiness you wish them. But make sure it's not "You are a kind soul/ You make my life bright/ You are the answer to my prayers/ You are the stars in the night" because thats just cheesy.
I think you did an excellent job. But I want to give you a piece of advice I love giving people. Look at your poem and assign it a color. Colors are associated with emotion (red is anger, yellow is joy, etc) and so when you write to make your poem a specific color, you end up writing with more emotion than usual. I love doing it, it's a great exercise.
Overall, good job and can't wait to read more of your works!
EverWinter
Points: 400
Reviews: 107
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