Hey! Just Jaylin here coming to leave a review. I honestly loved your poem. It was rather clever to compare life to chemistry. I am not very good at science but somehow I understood your point and loved it! Your word choice was also amazing! I think my favorite part of the poem is where you state " I don't "naturally" find equilibrium". That was a powerful part in the poem and really showed struggle to me. I have a few complaints but overall you demolished this poem! One of my critiques of this poem is the lack of proper closings to a stanza. Make sure when you are closing a stanza you use punctuation marks (, ; . ? ! etc). Also, make sure you start each new stanza with a capital letter. I believe that is all my critiques of your poem but you did fantastic. If this is only your first dwindle in dark poetry I would suggest you dwindle in it much more. You showcased your strength in this genre of writing with this poem. Keep up the good work!
Points: 11
Reviews: 24
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