Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
It was a very hot day. The weather report had said it was twenty-five degrees Celsius but it felt like much more. The streets were packed with irritable suits heading to work, vibrant American tourists, lonesome strollers, outlandish performers and local people, it as diverse as it was hot. A young woman, wearing a calm blue linen dress, a pair of large square framed sunglasses and a wide but elegant straw hat wandered down the steps of her hotel. She paused to inhale the various aromas; spices, perfumes and a strange scent that could not be described as sweet smelling but was some how appealing.
Well that makes for an interesting start. We've got ourselves a pretty neat little touch of description here. Its quite interesting in how calm and collected everything is so we're seeing essentially just a small simple picture being brought to life here. Its not the sort of start that sucks you in immediately but the type that just sort of lulls you in slowly by painting this beautiful picture.
In front of her lay a long stretch of spilled colour and sound. A dream like sequence of assorted performances, it was certainly like no place she’d been before.She began to walk, slowly, smiling. Not awarding her full attention to anything just yet, there was too much to see. She paused to finger the golden amulets, which sparkled against a lush violet velvet cloth. She stroked the silky scarves with the intricate threaded detail and she eyed the intense portraits and the way the artist flicked his brush passionately, dabbing at his palette. None of these things were very expensive but they were all so magnificent that she treated them as though she could not afford them.
Hmm well this is adding an interesting air of whimsy to the situation here. I don't believe I've seen a scene quite like this before. There's such a contrast of this rich and vibrant palette of colors being mixed in amongst this person running about the place with something of a childlike nature, and its painting a lovely little image here that you can't help but keep reading.
Overwhelmed by the heat but more by the scene she relaxed into a chair to absorb her surroundings. She sat back, sipping at her drink and experiencing entirely every gentle breeze that passed.
Well that seems a fitting ending to this piece. A simple bit of relaxation to cap off that exploration we saw earlier. I think that really ties this together. I wasn't expecting something this short to feel this complete especially with such as simple premise but I think you manage to take the readers on a surprisingly powerful little journey even in so little words.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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