For us teens, social media is not technology it’s just life. For some reasons, teenagers can’t go a day without surfing the net or posting something online. Teenagers use social media to entertainment themselves like watching videos posted or uploaded by other people. We can also gather information that can educate us and helps us in our academics. Social media also connects us to the people and enhances our communication and socialization. According to Kylie Burchat (March 13 2013), people also tend to communicate information that is now much more personal in nature. We learn to socialize to other people by sharing thoughts online. For us teens, it’s important to know that’s in and what’ out in our generation, most especially in social media.
One of the reasons why teenagers link to social media is for communication. As you all know, generation today is totally different, most especially to the teenagers in social media. According to Kylie Burchat (March 13, 2013), teenagers can communicate in many ways using social media, you can send messages, post comments or chat in real time when other people are online at the same time as you. Teenagers want to be updated on what is going on around the world or communicate with friends and family members. When they chat with their online friend, they can invite another friend online to join their conversation. According to Heather Gardner-Madras (July, 2009), there’s direct mail, email, person-to-person contact, text messages, Web sites and blogs, and any number of social networking sites. Communication now is indeed limitless so teenagers can communicate with other friends from a far. Some teenagers use social media to express themselves by blogging. They blog what they think and experience. So when they post their personal blogs, people can read, know and react to that blog posted. It gives other people a clue of what kind of teenager you really are and your personality or personal experiences.
Teenagers also use social media as a way to get information. Home works given to them nowadays is more on research so they tend to use social media to get the information they need. According to Aaron Elliott (August 1, 2013), anyone can simply look up for information on the amount of information published online daily. So it helps them in their responsibilities as a student in their academics. And according to Peter Campbell (March 2009), the Internet gives you access to a virtual smorgasbord of information. Information indeed became easier now. At the same time, it educates teenagers by the researches, educational videos and even online schooling. Social media also enhances teenagers way of talking and expressing themselves through English language.
Entertainment is also one of the reasons why teenagers link to social media. They can watch videos posted by other people in youtube. Teenagers nowadays are fun of taking videos of their fun experiences to be able to share it through social media. They too are fund of taking pictures of themselves, like what we call now as “selfie”. They also get entertained by browsing pictures with relatable quotes on it. Online games also entertain teenagers now. In this generation, phones can be used for social media. They can also download games on their phone. So teenagers can play games, anytime anywhere. Entertainment really became easier for teenagers because of social media.
To cap it all, social media is a big part of each and every teenager now. It enables them to connect to other people, to socialize, to earn knowledge and to express themselves. Like when they post there status on facebook, people can like and comment to their newly posted status. As well as on instagram, they can post pictures or videos of their amazing experiences and be creative on editing each picture and video. They can tweet what they feel and what’s in their mind on twitter. They can also earn followers on twitter and so their followers can read their tweets and retweet it if they feel the same way. Social media a way to relate yourself to other people. Some of the reasons why teenagers link to social media are communication, information and entertainment.
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Hey there mate,
Nire here with a review. I found your title interesting, because these days I read only about reasons Why teens should not link to social media and all that. So, different thinking there which I appreciate! Now, I agree with your previous reviewer. Don't you think you praised social media quite a lot? I don't and most of the people won't think them so much positive? (Oh really? Then you are the people who spend sorta 22 hours a day online?) Yes, but when you're writing an article on a topic which isn't at all flawless, it sounds or when you read it, you find it difficult to agree with.
Huh, so, all those positive, plus points you shared are cool and you deserve to get pat on back for that but along with that you could've written about the opposite side, right? That's all I have to say.
~Nire
I don't mean any offence, but I don't like the way this article encourages the use of social media so much. I mean, dude, people are already way too attached to smartphones and mobiles. They don't need to be given the idea that what they do is absolutely right. Real life, physical relationships have lost meaning as most of the world engages in Facebook chats, Twitter tweets and whatnot. What about THAT matter? Family is the most important thing in the world, and no matter how many 'friends' you make online, your family will be your only real companion when you need someone. I'm not talking about people on this site, just the world in general. It may seem offensive, but it is true, even for me.
Mysticalxx
Hey, I'm Knight Teen of the Green Room Knights here to give you a review.
Nitpicking first, general comments after.
You have a good, strong paragraph here. Your grammar needs a little work, and you desperately need a thesis statement, but overall you did good.
Now, you sort of have your thesis in this paragraph. But it's not condensed into one statement, as it should be.
Something like this would work:
Teenagers today link to social media in order to communicate, get information, and entertain themselves.
All the topics of your paragraphs placed into one statement. This is a good thesis statement. You don't have to use this, I just used it for a suggestion.
I'm not trying to offend you, but saying "us teens" is a little juvenile. You want to sound professional, right? Using the word, "teenagers" is a good substitute.
This is the incorrect form of the word. It should be, "entertain".
I believe what you meant here was, "fond".
You did pretty good. Everything that you said you backed up, and you did pretty good in writing this. It needs some editing, but overall you did a good job.
One last thing before I go, words like YouTube and Twitter need to be capitalized.
Everything that I say in my reviews are just suggestions, and if you don't want to heed them then that is your choice as the author.
KT
Hi! I just wanna have some review with your work.
It sounds better.


I am also looking for your thesis statement including your controlling ideas. I just recommend to be more careful next time. I know you can do it!

I like your title. Since social media is the most popular among teens, it is very opportune/timely. I just found some corrections.
"For us teens, social media is not technology it’s just life." I think you mean "For us teens, social media is not just technology, it's life".
"Teenagers use social media to entertainment themselves like watching videos posted or uploaded by other people.". It must be "entertain" not "entertainment" since you use this as a verb and not a noun.
"For us teens, it’s important to know that’s in and what’ out in our generation, most especially in social media." I think you mean "...it's important to know what's in and what's out in our generation...", isn't it?
"As you all know, generation today is totally different, most especially to the teenagers in social media." I think it's better to use "we" rather than "you" in your first four words.
I just noticed that some statements in your essay needs to be revised in a better way of organizing your ideas so you can give clearer information and ideas to your readers. I will also suggest to you the use of transitional devices so everyone who will read this will be properly guided on its flow.
Hope this helps!
-RachelLescano
Keep it up!
Very nice essay. I like your style in writing. So great. The title, thesis statement and the conclusion, you did it all well. Keep it up. You're a good writer