The Willow

Hey, I always love nature poetry. It reminds me of Hardy, which I always love. I like the focus being the willow tree - a beautiful, graceful tree. And I like the fact that you have personified this tree and given it more depth and character. However, I think a more subtle approach would give the poem more resonance. More is less, etc. I just think if you desribed the trees movements in a certain way then that would give us a better sense of what it wants.
For example - "The tree bends towards the sun," or something like that.

Hi rosereader! I see you joined a couple of weeks ago, so welcome to YWS! You have some nice words put together here, but I think the poem could use work.

First, a minor correction: "it's" in the second line should be "its." It's = it is, its = possession.

I'm slightly put off by the phrase "with ever so ease." "Ever so" is usually used to describe a verb and it sounds strange when paired with "ease." Maybe you could try "every so much ease," but that would mess up the rhythm. It's something you should toy with until you feel it sounds right.

I really like the repetition in the first line. It sets the meter up and adds emphasis to the willow tree.

I'm sort of concerned that you're constricted by the rhyme scheme. It's like there's something that you want to say in this poem that you're not quite getting at because you're trying to make it rhyme. Did you originally want the trees to be both hoping and moping, or just one of the two?

Finally, what is the point that you're trying to make with the poem? The trees want to become something else -- is that it? I think I'm missing the message.

Anyway, you have a nice start here. Let me know how it turns out!

-Abigail