You left her

I didnt like it. To be honest. I am not trying to be rude or anything.

The common thread in your poem was this line;

You left her standing

Yes, its all fine and dandy to have a common thread in a poem, such as this one with you left her standing, but when that common thread doesnt have as much as an impact you want it to have then it just doesnt appear to be as memorable as you intended it to be.

I feel in your case, you line made everything seem so redundant, so predictable that it made it loose its feeling of impact and power that it should have. His leaving her is the thing that this poem is about, and this seems like it could be a very sad topic. But you didnt have the passion there, the dramatic irony I like to see in poems. I rarely review poems because I dont usually have much to say about them, but your title peaked my interest. You see, the whole line of 'you left her' is sad and anyone can tell you that they understand the pain she must have been going through. What takes away that common knowledge is that you added the 'standing'. Standing to me is much impacting because it the deeper meaning behind it is to have strength and ambition. To stand up for yourself. But in such a case of having a loved one leave you, you are not strong, and surely you would not be able to stand up for yourself. For me, the standing just contradicts the meaning of the poem.

What I suggest you do is change up the 'standing' part and make it vary through the poem. It would reduce the redundancy and it would still maintain the common thread and give it a unified appearance. Like write a line like; 'You left her searching, for the pieces of her broken heart' or some thing like that. I fail at writing poetry. I give you props for being able too. Just adjust your poem to have those variancies and to suggest the weakness that she felt. You could even have each action at the end seem to make her gain more stength until you get to that final line to make it seem like she will be able to walk away. That would make it a little more impacting.

I am also a fan of imagery in poetry. Your poem is very one sided. You dont have any real metaphors. You have a couple in there but they are the cliche ones that are used everywhere. Describe things, maybe compare things to others to make something new. Just be creative and let your poem create a picture in the readers mind.

I will leave someone else to review on the other things about poetry because I dont know everything, and I don't want to mislead you if I say something wrong. Those things above are the certain things that I see with your work. You dont have to listen to my suggestions for they are of my own opinion.

You have excellent potential and would love to see more of your work. PM me if you have any questions.
~Incognito

EDIT: @Butterfingers response to my review: Ah, but you said it yourself, everyone has their own opinions. Nobody has to actually listen to mine as I stated in my review. To me, I find repitition wearing. It is a decent poem, I just think it could be done better. Thanks for your response though. I am glad to see your take on the matter. (: