I loathe you.
I loathe every word that falls from your lips.
Every time you wrap me in promises and empty hope, I believed you 'cause i loved you.
I used to thought maybe this time, you'll love me.
Maybe if I'd change myself, I'll finally be enough.
But I never was, right?
You never cared how deeply your words cut.
You never cared how many nights I cried because of you.
You made me feel like I was a burden,
someone too heavy to love.
I loathe the way you twist every conversation, how you make me question myself,
how you manipulate me, how you blackmail me,
until I don't even know what's true anymore.
I loathe you.
But not enough to keep begging for a place in your heart.
I'm done chasing a love that only exists when I become someone...I'm not.
All you ever did was replace me,
use me, and throw me away
the moment I wasn't enough.
And maybe I'm angrier at myself than I am at you;
for believing that if I tried harder,
loved louder,
or stayed quieter, things would finally change.
You called me stubborn.
You called me difficult.
But none of that ever gave you the right to break me.
The words you spoke echo louder than you know.
I still remember trying to breathe through an anxiety attack,
and the person who should have held my hand
told me to die.
Those words didn't leave bruises.
They left silence.
They left doubt.
They left a child wondering why love felt so impossible.
I spent so long waiting for you to choose me.
Now, I'm choosing myself.
Not because the pain disappeared,
but because I refuse to spend the rest of my life begging for love that has to be earned.
I won't let your voice become my own.
I won't let your cruelty define who I am.
This is where I stop chasing.
This is where I let go.
And maybe, one day,
"I loathe you"
will become
"I survived you."
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this is such a gorgeous poem, so I think i'll take some time and write a review!!
So to start off, my silly brain notices tiny typos
just a suggestion unless it's intentional...?
But anyway, that's my only critique.
overall this is definitely my favorite line. I feel it somewhere in a deep place, how no matter how much they want me to be them I will never turn out how they want me to be.
I quite enjoy the shift in mood, from anger, to hope, to regret and all around the spectrum. It's very emotional and really hits the reader like a gut punch.
Overall, I will say amazing job and keep it up!
~ yuuki the dinosoor
Hey! Today I'll be reviewing ur beautiful poem!
I appreciate the straightforward, almost harsh approach, the author used in the poem.
I knew from the title itself that the poem is about hate, but what caught my attention and made me think was the transition from hate to something else that was happening in the poem.
I liked how in the poem, the speaker keeps saying how he/she loathes the person, almost trying to convince himself that he/she does, and the memories presented show that he/she is incapable of moving on.
This line, in particular, resonated with me it shows how easy it is to internalize the feeling of being not good enough and put pressure on yourself. I also liked how the author moved from trying to find salvation in the other person to choosing himself/herself in the end it shows true growth while still leaving the ugly truth in the middle as a lesson.
My favorite part was the transition from the title to the closing line:
I think it is done masterfully and shows that the speaker has truly moved on from the relationship, accepting it as something that made him/her grow as a person but not defining his/her life.
The only thing I wanted to say to the author is to fix some grammar related issues and punctuation the raw honesty with which the poem was written made it a bit too harsh around the edges, and I think that minor adjustments could have made the most crucial lines even more powerful.
However, overall, I liked the poem it was painful, but it showed empowerment, and I liked that the author did not romanticize the breakup, instead, choosing to focus on personal growth after it.
Lovely work!<3
~hira ♡
Hi, quietcatastrophe! You are a wonderful writer, and this is just my opinion, so don't take it to Heart 😂
Is this on purpose? "thought" instead of think?
This hit me hard. I have known a lot of people who never cared what they say. It hurts, and this truly makes me feel that hurt.
This is powerful as well. The moment I wasn't enough is what I liked most about this sentence. It takes something already emotional and makes it feel worse (In a good way, if you know what I mean)
This made me question. Child? Is the author talking about his/hers parents?
That is the perfect way to end this. It closed things off beautifully and with a little glimpse of hope.
I hope you enjoyed my yapping
Overall, I rate this poem an 8/10
The reasons I did not give you a 10/10 (Which I do not give lightly)
There were some odd separations, which made it difficult to keep it together nicely
I wish there were more rhyming/similes. I really enjoy reading a poem with good similes. Rhyming is a personal preference; I just think it helps everything flow better.
You are very talented; I applaud this work!