you said it was my fault
so many times
i started hearing your voice
even when you weren’t there
i wore your words
like they belonged to me
let them settle in my chest
like something true
i thought i was too much
too loud
too sensitive
too hard to love
so i changed myself
little by little
hoping one day
i’d become someone worth staying for
but you watched me fall apart
like it was normal
like breaking me
was never something that bothered you
you said you loved me
but love shouldn’t feel
like begging to be seen
or apologizing for existing
and maybe that’s what hurts most—
not that you left
but that i spent so long
believing i deserved it
I hate you
for teaching me that
i hate you
for every silence
every cold look
every moment i felt small beside you
but not the way i used to
not loudly
not desperately
just enough
to finally leave
i hate you
and that’s why
i chose myself
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The entire piece is lovely.starting from the start,I felt the persona words how she had to change herself.I also would like the appreciation and awareness of the trap and change she had to take.Improve slightly on progression of the theme and deepening emotional imagery.
thankyou so much!! glad you like it
It is a nice piece you have featured emotions strongly and the words sync with the message
thankyou!