Published August 5, 2017
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(A/N: Trying at poetry. I may be failing. This is all true about me.)
Asexual...
A-sex-ual. A word. A sexualy.
Not. A. Gender-orintation.
Just a sexual orintation.
Not. I-could-go-either-way. Male or female. No, not that.
People who I love say:
" You will want to have sex/have childen." ( No. No, I won't. Don't feel the 'urge'. Never will. Never have. Have NEVER felt it/wanted it. Sex. Nah. Self-love. Yes.)
"It's not a REAL relationship without sex." (Why are 'relatonships' deffined by what you do with your body, in a sense?Kissing,hugging,sex ect.)
"You should date a girl." (No. Stop telling me this. I want to marry a man. I'm not Transexual.)
People. Have. It.Wrong.
Beautiful body and self. I. Love. You.
I do!
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Hello I'm here to review your poem
okay so first off, I can slightly relate to this poem as I am Demisexual.
I get where you said
' "It's not a REAL relationship without sex." (Why are 'relatonships' deffined by what you do with your body, in a sense?Kissing,hugging,sex ect.) '
I too do not understand why relationships are defined by sex.
but with that aside I'm going to actually review. So there are many spelling and grammatical errors.
A sexualy do you mean A sexuality?
relatonships = relationships
deffined = defined
maybe just go back and edit a bit to fix those and this poem will be amazing
keep up the good word and I look forward to seeing more from you!!
have a great day
>Adrian
Hello, InfiniteRectangles here with a review for you!
Okay, so the first thing I noticed about this piece is that it's not really a poem. At least, not in the traditional sense. It has no flow, no rhyme scheme (although poems don't always have to rhyme), and the lines towards the end read more like sentences than lines. This is more like prose that's split up in some places. That's okay, though.
I liked this piece because I can relate to it. I'm asexual as well and it can get really frustrating when people insist that once I meet the "right person", I'll want to have sex and children. The truth of the matter is that I want neither sex nor children, but they'll never understand that. Anywho, I'll continue with the review now. xD
Overall, I liked the message in this piece, but I don't know that I'd call this a poem. It's more of a rant split up into different "lines".
That's it for this review. Keep writing and have a wonderful day/night!
Ah, I really liked this. The majority of people these days don't understand asexuality. They don't know what it is. I mostly liked this poem because it explained what being asexual is.
"It's not a REAL relationship without sex." I highly agree to this. How come sexual intercorse is a 'supposed to happen' in a relationship? Can't someone have a partner without the sex part?
Anyways, I really enjoyed this poem.
Now for the small criticism, nothing major, I assure you!
I'm sure I'm the beginning when you had written, 'A sexualy' you had meant, 'A sexuality.' Just a small misspelling, but it's fine.
Also, it would be best for you to put spaces in between the commas.
This,isn't,correct.
This, is, correct.
You see where I'm going with here? I hope nothing is too confusing!
Other than these minor mistakes, I had loved everything else. I loved how you put a period at the end of every word when you were trying to make a point, trying to elucidate what you were trying to tell.
Ah, about the quoting part, I don't agree with relationships always about sex. I didn't put more words into it! I'm sorry!
Thank you.