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Warning: This poem contains themes that may cause anxiety and features negative body image.
I always look forward to weekends
A break from the stresses of school
But what is the point of the weekends
If worry is all that I do?
Sometimes I forget what I look like
When I try on the clothes that I’ve bought
And when I go check in the mirror
I always look worse than I thought
I aspire to be told I am perfect
From people who don’t even know
How I push myself to keep going
When I don’t even know where to go
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That’s a touching poem. Relatable and moving. Great job. Only one note:
“School” and “do” doesn’t really rhyme as in the other stanzas. It’s has a very good meaning that I’d totally keep, but I’d also change one of these sentences so it would fit with the poem.
That’s it, keep up the good work!
Omer.
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Powerful, both in structure and in style. Your meter is solid, your rhyme is solid. I almost want this to become a sonnet. Just two more lines, and...man. My only suggestion for the structure is to maybe change "I am" to "I'm" in order to keep the smooth 9-8-9-8 meter that you've got going in your stanzas.
Great message, and it speaks the truth. So, good job.
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I love this! This... pretty much sums it up. I especially love the last line.