Published October 9, 2015
Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for language and mature content.
The sand-paper lips
Touched my own.
/
I kept my eyes closed
And just listened
To the heavy breathing of my
/
(Lover?)
/
The exhales
Matched my own
And I felt the cold breaths
As the lips pressed
Against me.
/
My heart
Stopped, cold,
Dead.
/
The blood rushed to
My head;
I wasn't allowed to drift.
/
I hadn't a choice
/
But to accept my fate
That came with
My first
Kiss.
/
I didn't feel that feeling
That arousal
I so desired
/
Because I opened my eyes
Too soon
And all I could see was
Judas' face
/
The bastard cad
/
His sand-paper lips
were sucking my own,
/
Identifying me
To all (executioners)
Who cared to see
A little girl's
First Kiss:
/
The kiss of death.
/
/
/
**When I write my poetry I make my own punctuation and grammar rules so if it doesn't make any sense to you I apologize. Hopefully the story/ feelings of the poem are still there. I used the way I set out my poem to emphasize certain words/lines and to make it as uncomfortable as possible, if I've failed at then then oh well haha. Dear reader, I hope you enjoy.**
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Hi! Wow! Judging by the first verse I thought this would be a sappy love song but it definitely wasn't, which is an excellent surprise.
I'm in love with this part:
"His sand-paper lips
were sucking my own,
/
Identifying me
To all (executioners)"
I really like the poem, and I see nothing that I would change. I like how you make your own grammar rules. I think that you thus captivate the reader, making him/her concentrate more on the poem.
Keep on writing!