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A Moment Between Us

by pixiefy1


Ella had always preferred the comfort of solitude. While her friends enjoyed bustling crowds and loud nights out, she found peace in quiet places—a book in her hand, a cup of tea, the soft hum of the world passing by. But everything changed the day she bumped into him.

It was a rainy afternoon, the kind of weather that made the world feel heavy and muted. Ella was hurrying to the café on the corner, hoping to escape the drizzle, when she fumbled with her coffee cup and it slipped from her hands, spilling its contents all over the sidewalk. She bent down in a panic, muttering to herself as she tried to salvage what was left.

Then, a voice interrupted her flurry of movements.

“Here, let me help.”

Ella looked up, startled, and found a man kneeling beside her, his hand already reaching for the cup. He had messy dark hair, a gentle smile, and eyes that seemed to hold a warmth that instantly made her feel at ease.

“I’m so sorry,” she said, feeling embarrassed as she wiped at her hands with a napkin.

“No harm done,” he replied, his smile never fading. “It happens to the best of us.”

Their hands brushed as he passed her a fresh napkin, and for a brief second, it felt as though the world had shifted. Ella couldn't explain it, but something in her heart fluttered. She quickly looked away, trying to shake the feeling.

“Thank you,” she muttered, gathering herself.

“No problem. I’m Noah, by the way,” he said, standing up and brushing off his jeans. “Are you okay? I didn’t mean to make you drop it.”

“I’m Ella,” she replied, glancing up at him again. “And no, it's not your fault. I’m just... a bit clumsy sometimes.”

Noah laughed, and for some reason, Ella found herself smiling in return. “Well, at least we know you’re human. I think I’d be worried if you were some sort of coffee-spilling robot.”

The lighthearted remark made her laugh, and the awkwardness melted away. For a moment, they stood there, both a little wet from the rain but unwilling to part.

“Well, I’ll leave you to your coffee,” Noah said after a beat, taking a step back. “It was nice meeting you, Ella.”

“You too,” she said, feeling an odd mix of disappointment and relief as he walked away. She told herself it was just a passing encounter, nothing more.

But as the days passed, Ella couldn’t seem to shake the thought of him. It was like a small ember had been ignited in her chest, one that wouldn’t burn out. She found herself looking for him in every café she passed, in every bookstore she entered, and even in the park where she liked to sit and read.

And then, one day, she found him.

He was sitting at the corner table in the café, just as she had imagined. His gaze lifted when the door opened, and their eyes met. That same flutter in her chest returned, stronger this time. He smiled as she walked in, and Ella felt her heart race.

Noah stood up. “Ella, hey! Fancy running into you again.”

“It’s... kind of impossible to avoid bumping into someone when you’re always in the same places,” she said, smiling a little. “I think it’s fate.”

He raised an eyebrow, clearly amused. “Fate, huh? I like the sound of that.”

They spent the next hour talking about everything—books, movies, their favorite coffee blends, and how much they both loved the sound of rain. Time seemed to stretch endlessly when they were together, and every laugh felt like a moment stolen from the world.

As they said goodbye, Noah’s voice softened. “I’ll see you again, Ella?”

She hesitated, then nodded. “Definitely.”







Days turned into weeks, and their meetings became more frequent. They would cross paths in the park, at the bookstore, or even at that same café, where their conversations seemed to pick up exactly where they’d left off. Noah was kind, thoughtful, and easy to be around, and Ella couldn’t help but find herself looking forward to their time together.

One chilly evening, as the city lights twinkled around them, Noah invited her to a small, quiet spot by the lake. The sound of water lapping at the shore mixed with the cool breeze, creating the perfect backdrop for the conversation that had been brewing between them for weeks.

“I’ve been meaning to tell you something,” Noah said, his voice tentative but sincere.

Ella’s heart skipped a beat. “What’s that?”

He took a step closer, the distance between them shrinking until she could feel the warmth of his presence. “I think... I think I’m falling for you.”

Her breath caught in her throat. For a moment, she wasn’t sure she had heard him right. But when she looked into his eyes, she saw the truth in them—gentle, vulnerable, and real.

“I think I’ve been falling for you too,” she whispered, her voice barely above the wind.

The moment stretched between them, fragile but full of promise. Without a word, Noah reached out, cupping her cheek gently in his hand. Ella’s heart pounded in her chest as he leaned in, their lips meeting in a kiss that felt like the closing of a circle—like everything had led to this.

The kiss was slow and tender, as if they were savoring the moment, savoring each other. When they pulled away, they both smiled, as if they had just discovered something magical.

“Let’s take this slow,” Ella said softly, her fingers brushing his.

“Slow sounds perfect,” Noah replied, his thumb gently tracing her hand.

And from that moment on, Ella realized that maybe, just maybe, love could come when you least expect it—but when it does, it’s worth the wait.


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Tue Nov 19, 2024 1:41 pm
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Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the scary S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - Ella is walking in the city with her coffee and accidentally spills it! But a handsome stranger named Noah picks up the coffee for her. After days of meeting, the two fall for each other, because they were made for one another! Soulmates! Yayyy!!! ^v^

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - I don’t have any recommendations to make as of right now, but if you wanted to include more moments between them then I think it would add more to the story.

Chocolate Bar - I absolutely adore how you described Ella’s feelings about Noah, it felt like she was really falling in love with him! I think that my favorite part was right when the distance was closing between them, when Noah kissed Ella, because it felt right and real, they had each other, and nothing else mattered in the world. Noah actually cares about her feelings and that’s someone that she’ll keep in her life forever.

Closing Graham Cracker - Love is wonderful, love can take many years to find, but as time goes on and faith is still stored in hearts, then one will find whomever makes their heart sing. Ella lived through life not knowing that she would find someone who cared, but lo and behold, there is always somebody out there, somebody to fill the hole in a heart. Romance is not dead. :>

I wish you a marvelous day/night!




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Tue Nov 12, 2024 10:06 am
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Hi there! My name is Nadja and i will be reviewing your piece using the YWS S'more Method today!


Top Graham Cracker - What I Know

AHH Cute story! The sweet story of strangers finding love, is one of my favorites! Ella and Noah are so cute, I swear I could die, I am going to melt.

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - Room for Improvements
All the following points are just my opinions and you can take em with a grain of salt :)

I think you should maybe think about deviding the time skips a litte, to make it more clear, like maybe in this qoute:

“You too,” she said, feeling an odd mix of disappointment and relief as he walked away. She told herself it was just a passing encounter, nothing more.

But as the days passed, Ella couldn’t seem to shake the thought of him. It was like a small ember had been ignited in her chest, one that wouldn’t burn out.

Maybe make a little line between so it's clear that there is a skip!

Though you do not have to do this <3

Chocolate Bar - Highlights of the Piece

I seriously really loved this story, romance stories really melt my heart :)

Here are some I really enjoyed:

"Her breath caught in her throat. For a moment, she wasn’t sure she had heard him right. But when she looked into his eyes, she saw the truth in them—gentle, vulnerable, and real."

This one is so visual I feel like I can see this moment unfold, You do a really good job at decribing the moments where it gets a bit intense, this is so cute!

Another one is this one:

"As they said goodbye, Noah’s voice softened. “I’ll see you again, Ella?”

She hesitated, then nodded. “Definitely.”"

AGHHH THEY ARE SO CUTE, I swear I am dying over here, again really good with the visuals, and god these two. I wanna hear more from them

Closing Graham Cracker - Closing Thoughts

Overall such a great story, I am a sucker for a good Romance story, and you do such a great job at describing what is happening, really good visuals!

PS. Please give me more :3


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