Published February 20, 2014
Life is like the weather,
it storms when you're mad,
the sun shines when you're happy,
it rains when you're sad.
But there is always a rainbow at the end.
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hello
this poem is really good , it's simple but meaningful.
positives
simple words did the job , and were enough to make the reader get the poem .
the punctuation is good .
negatives
it's short .
it need some imagery and other descriptions
the title is OVER simple , you can replace it with something more catchy .
overall ...
very interesting poem , good idea "GOOD JOB"
keep it up
I liked your poem
You got straight to the point
I didn't catch any grammatical errors
Your format was great
Although this poem is great, it is a bit short.
maybe when you get a chance go back and add more.
But overall this was great poem
Thanks for the feedback!
Deadman here with a short review for you! I like the correlation between life and weather. Oh, wait where is my manners. Welcome to YWS, I see you're finding your way rather well. That's good! Okay back to he poem.
Pros-
1. The format is perfect.
2. Great topic.
3. Very, very well executed.
4. Great correlation.
Cons-
1. Short and to the point. It would have been epically amazing, if you could have dragged it out more. I understand it's hard to do that though.
2. Capitalization could use some work.
Great poem overall, and there wasn't that much wrong with it. I loved your concept, and how you executed it. I hope to see more from you in the future, and until next time, happy writing!
Cheers,
Deadman XD
Thanks for the encouraging feedback it's really helpful!
~Pinkdinosaurs x
I like the way you take us from one mood to another.
It's simple, but so deep. I just remembered few years ago when I found out I had sincope, the way my mood used to go from sunny to stormy in a few seconds.
But I wished you had written a little bit more. =)
I like your poem
the message is pretty simply put and short but I like just the worldly comparisons and just the message in general. What I get out of it is How there will always be those days when you have your ups and downs but at the end of the day you will always find happiness even within the darkness that may come from the day. Being a writer as all of us here are I probably would've put the same message into different words but we all have a different way of writing it but in all good job 
Thank you so much!
~Pinkdinosaurs x