Published November 5, 2011
Taken down, thanks to everyone for all the feedback
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That was brilliant! A magnificant ending! I love the part where the say that the amulets are the only things keeping them alive. It is full of action, has an intense atmosphere and a bloody battle in it, all in all, bloody brilliant. I believe it should be given a 100/10. Mainly because it is very exciting and fun to read. I hope that there will be a come back for this for I shall be eagerly waiting.
i really liked it! it was action-packed and gripping. however, the ending was a little abrupt. you might want to edit a few things. great job