Published December 10, 2011
TAPIOCA AS A SEMICONDUCTING MATERIAL pt 6
1
Gomez winked at me with coffee ring eyes
no you cannot have any juice
psychokinesis, Scully!
I have been a soldier in water gun wars
fought in foreign countries, Gomez
canned vacuum, dust swarms like bees
on the TV stand where you left your cup
he isn't my brother but I willed him my monocle.
2
Gomez has been a student of the three
hat karates. The karate of the baseball cap
used best in frozen food aisles at supermarkets,
the grocery store stance makes my ass look fat.
The karate of the deerstalker best used
on falling ladders. If this is your style of choice
avoid long dark women and snowmen wielding
corncob pipes. The karate of the greek fisherman's hat,
the art of wielding candle smoke and door hinges
use this style east of the Mississippi and beware a man
with a prosthetic leg and
why did you just draw on my computer screen
3
on an aircraft carrier six hundred miles away
off the coast of australia the captain's phone is ringing
sorry I have to get this.
4
ever since the computers took over:
take the stairs.
it is bring your kid to work day today
please remember that it is wrong to indoctrinate your children
honey, please ignore the robots.
calling someone a sweet potato is not endearing
oh no Mulder's having problems with the chain of command
again
when they are in bed together at the end of the episode
he whispers. It is 1993 and this kind of technology is ten years out
he looked angry after the phonecall
but the captain didn't say who it was
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there are threads, you have to find them.
as always, I enjoy your honesty.
Hey there, doll. My name is Pyro, and I will be reviewing your piece today.
Tapioca as a semiconducting metal. I'm an engineer, so that title instantly drew me in. LOVE the title.
Unfortunately, I cannot honestly say that my love of this piece extended far past the title. You had several interesting thoughts in the beginning, but that was it. THOUGHTS. Separate, independent, choppy thoughts. You didn't have any factor drawing them together, you blatantly refused to stitch your convoluted craziness into coherency. Please understand, though, that crazy is good. Crazy is unique, individualizing, and marks you as the person you are. This piece though. . . . To me, it reflected more that you were lacking in the refined ability to transition and communicate your insanity to the general populace.
I really wish that I could give you a more satisfying review upon your piece, but the title is all you have going for you.
.........Really. The title. I'm serious.
I really hope you improve on your ability, friend.
Yours,
Pyro