*A/N: I would love title suggestions if you have any!*
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When we meet
I know it will be
The best day of my life.
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I will cry
And try to explain why
The tears won’t stop flowing from my eyes.
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I’ll tell you thank you,
Simply for being you
And for supporting me in everything I do.
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You’ve brought joy
Into the void
That was my empty and broken soul.
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And seeing you grow
Is a blessing God has bestowed
On me as I walk this journey with you.
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So I pray to Him
When the light turns dim
Because He proved life is worth living
By giving me
You.
This is a really good depiction of love, personified into reality. You care very much for this unnamed character and it shows an inseparable bond. Never leave this person, keep them close to your heart always. A love like this doesn't come around to often. As far as the poem goes, I love the way it was written. Overall, very good...9/10.
I LOVE THIS. The way you write without using names allow me, the reader, to think of whomever i desire to imput. I insert my Dad, who fills this description perfectly. This is beautiful. Thank you so much.
Hi, here with a review. I really liked the title, you don't need to change it (in my opinion) because it grabbed my attention. I like the rhyming scheme as it gives it a flow. I can see that there's a sort of journey that went on during this poem that may be there in real life. I really like your choice of words; it's different despite being so simple. Overall, I loved this, and keep writing!
~Rosy234
Hello there, Pendr!
This is Moonwatcher here for a review!
I would like to point out that the poem is labeled as satire.
sat·ire
ˈsaˌtī(ə)r/
noun
the use of humor, irony, exaggeration, or ridicule to expose and criticize people's stupidity or vices, particularly in the context of contemporary politics and other topical issues.
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