My hands resting
My words hiding
Nothing to write
Mind fighting against itself
You hear the words
Ringing like birds
None to come out
Ideas lost on a shelf
Now tedious
Delirious
Page is still blank
My words are now losing health
Inspiration
My saving grace
To rid me of
This block that loses itself
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Hello there,
Sorry but I have to say that you have chosen a very over used topic here. It is such a common thing for people to write about and it has unfortunately lost it's charm. I find that poems like these are really only good the first time. But unfortunately now 'writers block' is one of the most common poetry topics, which is kind of funny because if you have writers block and you are writing about it then really you don't have it at all because otherwise you wouldn't be writing a poem no matter what the topic! Sorry that sounded very confusing!
Despite that though this was very good, it was simple and to the point. I was happily surprised by your talent to turn turn an incredibly common topic into something that I really enjoyed reading. One thing I would suggest doing is perhaps making this longer because it was very short and I longed to read more because the ending didn't really sum up the poem very well. Overall very good.
Now my friend where is the punctuation? There is not a single full stop in this whole thing! I do believe in writers license but i think you need to at least put some in just to show that you weren't just being lazy because at the moment it looks untidy and very slapdash. Please put some punctuation in, it would really hep the reader know what emotion you were trying to portray. It is like how an exclamation mark can make a person seem as though they are shocked or happy, it really adds to the story a lot!
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Well first of all nicely well done ^^. Can't really pinpoint anything other than add some commas and periods or something....maybe that is me just liking punctuation in poetry but oh well. ^^ Either way I didn't find anything wrong with spelling nor really with grammar. Some lines look a bit long but I don't think it necessarily needs to fix, just wanted to point it out ^^. In all honestly I truly loved it. Very inspiring. I say you could add more emotion into it by showing just how frustrating writer's block could be and how it really effects the writing process. All in all a nicely well done poem. If you need help with anything just send me a PM or post on my wall and I'll be happy to help. Keep up the good work. Buenas Suerte y Adios.
Soulkana<3