Puppet

by paintingtherain97

Published September 14, 2011

I am no damn puppet,
not a marionette,
to be pulled by the strings
of the creepy guy,
the puppetmaster.

He cannot tell me
what clothes to wear,
what things to say,
how to act...

I am no puppet.

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HelloKitty87
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HelloKitty87 wrote a review Review · Sep 14, 2011

Excellent! this deserves a ' Like '.. you're right, guys won't tell us how to look, dress, or act. we're free to be ourselves, if they don't like it, they can just sit on it :)

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PWeezyBaby1 Comment
PWeezyBaby1 commented Comment · Sep 14, 2011

this poem was incredible, but i think you could expand more, but this is your poem and if you dont know that its still amazing

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Starhunter
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Starhunter wrote a review Review · Sep 14, 2011

Wow, very powerful here!
I can definitely feel the emotion here; your anger and frustration come clear.
My only suggestion would be (and this is only a suggestion, when it comes to poetry, who makes the rules?), if it were me, I might add some more in the second verse, or maybe just drop the space between the second verse and the last line. Good job, though. Very powerful.



worlds buzz over us like bees, / we be splendid in new bones.
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