He saunters along the dingy walls of the satained hallway. In pursuit of a part of him that see's life as an oppotunity and not a place thrust upon him by chance . He rhymically descends the five stone step that lead to a large oak door that stands between him and the world . " How dreery it is to alone in a world of so many" . During his extended period in solitude he'd developed those odd behaviors that accompany unnatural states of being . He then opens the door with two laborious and explodes into a run . fat cheecked children with there wide eyed mothers go unpertubed by the burly man bursting by them . After reaching the entrance of the gate Goerge as was his name slowed to a less rapid pace and placed his large brown hands on his knees to rest . After several minutes in this postion he continued onward . His face place in a downward fashion , eyes lowerd ,shoulders sulken George began to walk seemingly aimlessly he proceeded this way for several blocks. Upon reaching his intended destination a small neatly place tavern sitting between two gigantic restored apartment buildings that seemed to George to be never ending . Without ever breaking stride Geogre steped quietly in the tavern and was overjoyed to discover only a few people about . He loathed large groups they made him nervous and not being the most gregarious of creatures perfered small intimate settings . He looked around the room several couples were sprawled about laughing and drinking . None of the booths were occupied despite Georges desire to sit in one of the warm private cubicles he didn't it would draw to much attention to him and instead cozyed up to the one of the bar stools and sat . Upon sensing the familar figure the sitting there the barkeep
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I%u2019m going to review your work %u263A
First thing I%u2019d say is it%u2019s one big paragraph. Maybe you should separate it out into maybe two or three smaller ones. It would make it look more appealing rather than just looking like a block of writing.
In addition, I just think it%u2019s important to note that your vocabulary is very good.
Is it meant to be %u2018stained%u2019?
It%u2019s %u2018opportunity%u2019.
Okay do you mean %u2018rhythmically%u2019? It%u2019s %u2018steps%u2019 not %u2018step%u2019.
It%u2019s dreary.
Firstly, %u2018fat%u2019 needs a capital letter. It%u2019s %u2018cheeked%u2019. It%u2019s %u2018unperturbed%u2019.
I think you mean %u2018George%u2019.
I think you mean position.
[quotes]His face place in a downward fashion , eyes lowerd ,shoulders sulken George began to walk seemingly aimlessly he proceeded this way for several blocks. [/quote]
His eyes %u2018lowered%u2019 and %u2018sulken%u2019 is not a word.
It%u2019s %u2018George%u2019 and %u2018Stepped%u2019.
It%u2019s preferred.
It%u2019s %u2018cozied%u2019 and this is a long sentence. Could you break it up a little?
It%u2019s familiar.
It seems to me that you have not checked through your work. Please make sure you check before posting in future.
you have used some really ambitious vocabulary here. there are a few typos but if you maybe re read it i am sure you will find them, if not just ask and i will tell you where they are
i also think that you could extend this into a really great story 
thanks for the review and stuff there are many typos i will fix thoses and extend it abit