To My Dearest Lover,
How are you making out?
Are your ambitions reached yet,
or am I still weighing you down?
Did you see all that you wanted to see?
Did you travel all around?
Was leaving me here alone quite worth it?
Or is it nothing that you have found.
I've sat awake for days on end,
hoping to hear a word.
It's now been a year since I've heard from you,
and my dear, that's quite absurd.
It leaves me here to only ponder,
If you've found love again,
If she loves you the way I do,
If she knows where the hell you've been.
I'm tired of longing for the past,
Of which we spent together,
If it's over, please enlighten me,
I won't hold on forever.
If it's the end you wish,
Please don't be hesitant to tell,
If that's the case, I promise you,
I sure won't wish you well.
Cheers to you, my special man,
Hanging me to dry,
You think you were so slick to fool me,
You think I couldn't catch your lies.
Think of me while you lie with her,
Caressing her in bed,
I promise you with all my heart,
I will haunt you in your head.
I send you nothing but hate, my love,
I hope she breaks your heart,
I should have seen this sooner,
I hesitated from the start.
To bring this letter to an end,
I hope you've found a life,
One of which you're happy with,
By leaving behind your wife.
It would be rather spiteful of me,
To wish your plane will crash,
To hope you choke in your sleep,
Or come up with an awful rash.
Think of this as my own goodbye,
For you'll never see me again,
I promise that to you this time,
Because I've taken matters into my own hands.
I'm ending this, this painful life,
Of misery and waiting,
I hope when the news is broken to you,
You'll find it devastating.
The headlines will scream out to you,
"Young Woman Takes Her Life",
Because of you, my oh-so faithful husband,
You'll no longer have a wife.
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Thank you for the input, both of you! I wouldn't have caught it otherwise. I went in and changed it. I think I was just typing so quick, and reading over it so quick, I didn't seem to catch it!
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This song was rely catchy! I wonder what the tune is like... Like havetolovemusic said, you need to watch out for grammer okay like
I know it has already been taken care of but be really careful. Make sure you read you text over at least twice before submiting it. if you do not want to read it over again, have some one else read it. The most effective way to edit is to handwrite it get it revised then type it. After typing it, make sure you look over it one more time. If you do not want o do all that, you can ask me to help you any time. Your song was amazing! I want to read more!I really liked this poem. It flowed and had a good rhyme scheme. One thing I noticed was this line :
"You think I can't catch you lies."
Either it should say '...I can't catch your lies' or '...I can't catch you lie.' It doesn't make sense the other way.
I loved this stanza:
"The headlines will scream out to you,
"Young Woman Takes Her Life",
Because of you, my oh-so faithful husband,
You'll no longer have a wife."
It was a good ending to the poem, and brought the whole thing to a dramatic close.
I loved this poem and think you are a really good writer. Keep writing!