Published August 9, 2011
Death came to me like the wind. Lights and sounds blared all around me, so at first I didn’t even realize He was there. He came up behind me and I felt a chill. The icicles cut to my bones and I tried to run. I wanted to be anywhere but here. Yet, I did not want to leave either. I did not want Him to take me, so I wanted to stay in this disaster. People were screaming and I wanted to stay. I looked down. I watched one of my tears fall and disappear before it hit the pavement. The night air had been warm and held the moisture of a rain that is just about to fall. All I felt was the cold that Death brought with Him.
I gasped when I saw Emma. She had come for me. She was just barely too late, though. I tried to run to her, but I could not leave the spot where I stood. I tried to call out to her, but no sound left my mouth. I refused to turn around though I could feel Him behind me. Emma was here now. I would never leave as long as she was here with me.
The first drops of rain fell, but I could not feel them. They passed through me and gathered on the pavement below. More of my tears fell and disappeared on the street. Finally I turned. I turned walked into the waiting arms of Death.
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I agree, this would have been great if it was expanded into a story. A lot of questions here. Like whom is speaking? Why is she/he so close to Death? And who is this Emma person?
However this is a really nice piece. Great depth to it. This work is unique and a joy to have read. The way you explained every emotion was perfection.
Beautiful is all I can say
To be honest, that's pretty scary... In a good meaning)) Honestly, I liked this piece even thought it's sad and difficult to read emotionally. Very good writing and deep feelings in it. I just wish you could expand it, make it a part of a longer story. Because it's interesting to know, for example, how you appeared in that situation or who Emma is.
In conclusion, it's an unusual and exciting work, love it!