Hey nogutsnoglory, Katja here to review your poem "Things I Want to Tell You". As with all of my reviews please feel free to disregard any and all comments or suggestions I make if you find them unhelpful. With that being said, lets get into the review!~
Overall thoughts
Your poem is very well-written. Firstly, it uses metaphors and comparisons very well, that it all flows very naturally. The imagery you use never draws attention away from the overall tone of your poem and I applaud you for that.
The format/structure of the poem works very well with the subject of this piece and likewise does not take any attention away from the tone- it flows well for the subject in my opinion.
The poem seems to express peace at being with someone the narrator loves- they wish to remain by this person's side. This person has given the narrator new-found self-worth and showed them how to be themselves in this world.
You taught me how to stand on my own,
and now I wish to stand with you.
I really love these lines~
Suggestions
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I recommend starting with a capital since in the rest of the poem you seem to use capitals at the start of new lines and punctuation consistently. Just a thought.
That's all I have for suggestions~
Summary
I am very impressed with your poem- your use of imagery and structure combined with this subject was very well put together. I particularly appreciate the topic which comes across as very mature and not at all like a "puppy love" "secret admirer" angsty poem that many poems tackling similar subjects often do.
I hope my review was helpful~
Keep Writing,
~Katja
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