A Freind's smile

hi! i like this poem mostly because i can SORT of relate but also because DAMN i like the rhyming scheme and also because it's genuinely a positivity gleaming writing which idk if it makes sense,
it starts off pretty lonely, which yes, makes sense because narrator seems to be questioning HOW it became so that his friends became his books —> and tbh this is like A tier way to spend time as a person with like little to no friends so im supposing that this is what the lines "Why did they look
Why did my only friend become my book?" mean.

the other two lines of the same stanza, "Maybe because I didn't speak.
No one ever got to see my peak." is something i can probably relate to which makes it nice to see, holy representation, but anyway this kind of gives off a sense of regret? and i like the narrator answering their own question (about how their only friend became a book) by these two lines because honestly very relatable with the "maybe" too.

the two lines of the 2nd stanza is a bit confusing though, because narrator states;
"I just didn't have any words.
Like my whole brain was flying away like a bird's"
but i think it might be a small mistake in the grammar? if narrator means to say, their brain flies away like a bird, then i suppose that's make sense but here it' written "bird's" which could mean the narrator's brain flies away like a bird's brain, which is now obviously confusing HAHHA but yeah it's alright.

The rest of the poem gives me a very positive flow, im sorry if it's not supposed to be that way i can smell the hints of loneliness in this, but anyway poetry analyses mostly are projections (this is just for me pls dont mind)

overall, i really like the rhyming scheme, i dont want to really correct anything because, once again, no universally correct way to write poetry, but i think the grammar COULD be a bit misleading so yeah, i enjoyed reading this, so keep writing and good day!

This poem impressed me with its theme: the transition from isolation to acquiring confidence and friendships.

From the very first lines, the reader learns about the isolation of the character who sees a book as his "only friend." I also enjoyed how the poem became increasingly hopeful with each step of the journey described in it and with each time the character mentioned his moving to a new school.

The transition from "hiding under my sweater" to "in control" was quite efficient as it reflected a significant change in the character. The ending of the poem sounded triumphant with such phrases as "We did it; we are finally whole!" It creates an impression that the speaker is both proud of his friends and feels confident enough about himself.

Some rhymes in the poem need improvement. Some of them were somewhat strained, and the idea was not communicated efficiently (for example, "new" and "chew"). You can try changing some wording or make some lines unrhymed for a more natural reading.

The poem demonstrates quite a consistent emotional transformation: loneliness, desire to escape, and finally, acquire a new start in life. Its ending is quite hopeful which makes the journey of the speaker quite rewarding.

The poem is also quite interesting with its level of determination: the speaker does not want to be trapped anymore and takes the control of his life.

I hope you post more works soon!

this is actually really cool to me as someone who can't think of rhymes to save his life. Anyway, I'm gonna talk about some lines I liked & then give my overall review.

Why did my only friend become my book?

Like my whole brain was flying away like a bird's

We did it; we are finally whole!