Young Writers Society

Somebody once told me the world is gonna roll me
I ain't the sharpest tool in the shed
She was looking kind of dumb with her finger and her thumb
In the shape of an "L" on her forehead
Well the years start coming and they don't stop coming
Fed to the rules and I hit the ground running
Didn't make sense not to live for fun
Your brain gets smart but your head gets dumb
So much to do, so much to see
So what's wrong with taking the back streets?
You'll never know if you don't go
You'll never shine if you don't glow
Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play
Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show on, get paid
And all that glitters is gold
Only shooting stars break the mold
It's a cool place and they say it gets colder
You're bundled up now, wait till you get older
But the meteor men beg to differ
Judging by the hole in the satellite picture
The ice we skate is getting pretty thin
The water's getting warm so you might as well swim
My world's on fire, how about yours?
That's the way I like it and I never get bored
Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play
Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show on, get paid
All that glitters is gold
Only shooting stars break the mold
Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play
Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show, on get paid
And all that glitters is gold
Only shooting stars
Somebody once asked could I spare some change for gas?
I need to get myself away from this place
I said yep what a concept
I could use a little fuel myself
And we could all use a little change
Well, the years start coming and they don't stop coming
Fed to the rules and I hit the ground running
Didn't make sense not to live for fun
Your brain gets smart but your head gets dumb
So much to do, so much to see
So what's wrong with taking the back streets?
You'll never know if you don't go (go!)
You'll never shine if you don't glow
Hey now, you're an all-star, get your game on, go play
Hey now, you're a rock star, get the show on, get paid
And all that glitters is gold
Only shooting stars break the mold
And all that glitters is gold
Only shooting stars break the mold

Simple gorgeous, I have no complaints.

Have you ever seen a poem so beautiful you started crying? I immediately felt compelled to give you the nine dollars I have in my backpack and say "this is the best poem I have ever seen so I think you deserve it. I was going to buy my lunch with this but whatever" but I decided against it. Then I started crying. I seriously cried for an hour. I ran to the bathroom and came out later and I was even more tired than before. I was overtired already and btw I'm a girl. I don't know why I cried because of that but this poem was better than all of the poems I've ever read!

(thank you for putting up with my terrible use of this meme)

Beauty in its most peak, refined form

Radrook here to provide my feedback to the best of my ability to those who are requesting it. Please note that I strive to avoid offending and if I by any chance might do so, you have my most sincerest apologies.

That having been said, at first i was confused because I understood that the man was known for the first letter of each line. So I understood the that he would be known for an "S" then an "H" and so on. Each individually separated from the others. Then it dawned on me that you were referring to an acrostic and found the word Shrek. Since I saw the film with this green ogre as the star I wondered whether the term "handsome" was appropriate. Then I realized that the statement is verbal irony.


Acrostics are always a challenge to do and fun. Thanks for sharing.

Ahem.

Poetry is a divine form of art. It holds meaning beyond measure, it is a way that artists can express themselves with language. It is the purest form of art.

It is clear to me that you take your art very seriously. A true poet among us mere mortals, yes, this is truly the height of poetic performance. We all should just give up now! No one can ever reach this level of art.

Now on to the content. I shed tears when I read this. Your language and word play was stunning.

And the meaning. I will never again be the same. What true love. What deep passion. You clearly care a lot about the topic.

Thank you for writing this. It has changed my life forever. Please, keep writing, but know that this is probably your peak performance.

ciao, friend
ella

Beautiful, just beautiful. I cried when I read this. It is just so beautiful.

Hello, E.E here for a possibly quick review and maybe some utter nonsense! Grim is here as well, drinking hot cocoa and being a slacker. *Grim looks over, glaring* So, lets get started.

So, to start out this review, YES A SHORT POEM. I love reviewing short poems. They are quick and its fun to see if they pack a punch or not! And this poem, this acrostic, By the Celestials, I laughed so hard on the inside (I was in class when I wrote this), when I read the line! Seriously, the memes are strong with this one. Besides that, I didn't notice anything wrong with the poem. It flowed well and the grammar was good. But if you don't use grammar, please remember to put in an Authors Note to address things about your poem/work that you want us readers to know!

Seriously, the memes. I was not, in any way expecting to see the word SHREK on the side as the acrostic. I must say, you did well. Its hard to pull them off, I know, considering I have written many.

Overall, I liked the poem and keep up the good work! So, happy Valentines Day ! I really need to go now, Grim has souls to reap and he needs more cocoa. He has a problem, seriously. Annnd I think he brought a dinosaur to life. Great. Anyways, Cheerio and fruit loops to you!