I would follow you to the ends of the earth. Wherever you would have me go.
You lead me out of the darkness and into the morn that I may see the sun rise again.
If the wolves come to set me off my course I will cling to your shinning light. You are my leader, my she wolf, and I will howl up to you.
Even though you are surrounded by the other shinning stars you will always shin the brightest. When the others leave and change you are always steady my never changing point.
Though I may not see you I know you are always there after years of oppression you will set me free as you set the others before me.
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this is so cool!
Hey! Welcome to the site
This was good, if a little confusing at first. Once I reread it, though, it was very beautiful... I actually read it several times so I could understand it better. I think what originally threw me off was the run-on of some of your sentences and the fact that it's poetry, but formatted in a paragraph.
On to nit-picks...
The first 'I' you use, it's capitalized, but the rest of them are lowercase. I'm not sure if you did this by accident... it almost looks like you got caught up in writing and left the capitalization as many poetry writers do.
"...stars you will always shin the brightest." I think you meant 'shine' here
There are a lot of areas where you could insert a comma to aid flow, but that's just about it!
Anyways, great job! I like the use of the wolf when describing someone you depend on, since wolves have pack relationships, and care for one another like family/close friends.
Great job! Nice to see another poet on the site
I really liked how you incorrperated how it led others to freedom. Maybe try to make the writing flow together. I think that you could have done a better job at making it flow together. It was confusing that at first you were fighting wolves and then you were acting like them. good job.
lol nightflyer...
it's weird calling you that
Hi Megan this is a really epic poem! Because I was sitting next to you as you wrote it, I know how quickly you can come up with such inspiration
Awesome description and details, word choice and flow- really made it beautiful and reflected the essence of the poem. I think it would make even more of a statement if you aligned the stanzas/structured it differently, instead of in all one paragraph. A few "i"'s to be capitalized, but I know this isn't a very 'professional' work yet XD you can always edit later. Also it'd be nice if the title was capitalized. This can be a really nice poem! Use it for a contest or something one day 
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Hey thanks for the reply T.I.N. you can probably realize that i'm not a professional writer but i'll try to do better. I think that a better format would be a good choice as well.Thanks for the reveiw.