Published January 8, 2010
Can you control the feeling of bursting hot flames that run through you like the blood in your veins? Pain and suffering comes complete with the uncontrollable sensation you feel when entwined with love. A leap of faith and a heart wrenching drop. Once caught there’s no going back. Some never get love that lasts a lifetime they are too tangled up in this insanely crazy world. I know that anyone can fall in love, and all they have to do is take a shot at this risky gamble. Tears happy and sad are introduced almost instantly, but remember they are closely related. God takes a hand in that game and knows when we have found that one that takes over us, and suddenly controls everything. Love an unexplainable, and horribly illustrated force of confusion. Sometimes I wish I was never introduced to this fate that was soon to condemn me. It is a consistence of friendship, partners, and a life long vow to have and to hold. Sometimes it gets hard and the worst happens, but a broken heart can be mended. Like when you try to swallow all you tears and that burning ripping feeling occurs which only makes it feel worse. Over a long trail of doubt, and depression slowly we regain our old selves. Eventually we try to forget or in other words I give up on love. We can not easily put away our fears we faced, our heart that was finally filled with joy, or the love, care, commitment, and passion brought out of our soul. We could not face these good emotions without dealing with hate, sadness, and hardship. Love can be everything hard and easy. I hope you understand love a little more, and come to cherish it as I do.
~myintensity~
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Life is pointless, death is inevitable, and love is the only variable that keeps them from clashing for our fate. But without love our fate of death, becomes our destiny. Giving up on love means giving up on a spectacular piece of life. A life without love is no life at all. Love is painful, most of the time unbearable but necessary, some people cant stop loving someone because their convinced things will play out in their favor. Even though their visions are maybe unrealistic they still try because they know whats right. Dont give up on love, take another gamble with a game you already know. Don't hesitate to realize who truly love you and who is worth gambling on. Sometimes things do work out and relationships are meant to be even if they dont last the time it does is so precious. some people would give the world for just a moment of being with the person they love, for their dreams to come true for just a moment.