Specimen 48- Prologue
Paranoia. It’s not that bad, after you get over the whole feeling of everyone is watching you every single day. It’s pretty much a sixth sense for me. I thought about it as the scientists built another maze, one to test my agility and ability to adapt.
“Ready? And go.” I ran into the maze. Left, right, straight.
Paranoia kept me alive, especially in here. Right, right, left, turn around, right. I sprinted out of the maze.
“And stop,” one of the scientists said. They all crowded around me, so I couldn’t run off.
“Wow! Five seconds faster than last time,” said a different scientist.
“Of course she would be faster,” snapped the first one.
Ugh! I hated when they argued about me. I thought about lighting them on fire, but that would create more problems than it would fix. I turned around and saw them all nod at me, a gesture meaning I was allowed to live. I sighed as they escorted me back to my cell. I had made my decision. I was breaking out.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm Knight Hardy here on a mission to ensure that all works on YWS has at least two reviews. You will probably never see this but....Imma do this anyway.
Anyway let's get right to it,
Hmm, with that kind of title and this sort of start, well this is definitely quite interesting. The focus on paranoia as something that's very important also suggests a lot of red flags right here...we've got ourselves a lot of questions coming in from just this first bit here and that is great for a prologue. From what I can see it looks like this person is somehow being forced to explore this maze for some reason and said maze is quite potentially filled with quite a few hidden dangers for this person.
Oooh, so there are using this person as a literal test subject and even arguing about how their hypotheses change and whatnot. That shows a serious detachment from the fact that this is a human life that they are playing around with here. That and the detail about this person having to live in a cage here are really interesting to not here...cause you can see just how badly this person must be getting treated not to mention how difficult it has to be to cope with the fact that this person's fate between life and death is decided quite that casually. The point it ends on here is also rather powerful with this person sort of vowing to escape there. This definitely comes together to be a really solid prologue here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
I always love these sorts of stories. Test subjects. Holding cells. Escape. Great stuff. I noticed a couple of errors here, though. "then it would fix" should be "than." Also "alowed" should be "allowed."