Published May 9, 2007
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Hey Meevs (I keep thinking I'm spelling that wrong, most other people seem to spell it Meeves
). You just had to bring Becca back in, didn't you? I really hated her lol.
meant that rob would be taking her out all weekend
Forgot to capitalise Rob there.
“I hate her Rob.”
You need a comma after her there, otherwise it sounds like she owns Rob and he hates Rob and so on lol.
and put it on top of her head to Stop her clicking altogether.
You don't need that capital 's.'
Rob would not be best pleased.
That sounds a bit awkward.
Anyway, I'll move onto the next bit to see if Becca's gona lol. I can hope, can't I?
Just posting the end of the chapter here:
Becca made a strange clicking noise in her mouth when she slept. It was like she was deliberately clicking her stupid buck teeth to annoy me, even in her sleep. Something deep down inside of me was telling me to just pick up my pillow, and put it on top of her head to Stop her clicking altogether. But I couldn’t very well do that: Rob would not be best pleased. What annoyed me slightly more than her clicking was that her being in my room stopped Chris being in my room. That made me want to smother her with my pillow even more. But I was not a violent person and I was not going to do that. Besides, I knew that I had a place here in this home and Becca didn’t, so that meant that now I could threaten her not to move in on my life, or I could stand on her feet or pull her hair. You know what they say, what goes around comes around.
Lol JC there is a 19 and 20 you reviewed them!
Thanks to everyone for reading this, will be posting the next part sometime today!
Meevs
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straight from 18 to 21??? ahh!!! where's 19, and 20??? =(
But, on a lighter note, YAY! You're posting it again! Happiness!
This was another very good peice! Your writing is soooooooo good, it makes me jealous!
hehe, well, hope to see more of ice cubes around!!! =D
-JC
Yay, more Ice Cubes! I really like this story, so, keep up the good work. Hope to here more.
-- M.B.Author
Whoa, where has this side of Jamiy come from? HeHe.
Good come back Meeves. I really liked this piece. Can't wait for more!
Alainna
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