Hey Minakshi!
It was a short and simple poem but still I could feel strong vibes coming out of it. You chose a very intense idea of depression, something many people overlook as just a state of being sad and isolated but I know this a serious mental health issue!
I liked structure of your poem though I don't think use of so many periods is required but it's your choice so that's fine.
This small quoted line
felt very deep. The girl has succumbed to her sufferings and now people are just showing their pity and sympathy for her."may she rest in peace"
The war ended for her and she failed!
Because depression wasn't there
for the first time..
She had already tasted this
sour lime.
These lines were my favourite. This proved that she has suffered a lot before and now this depression came back to her.
I felt you have very well expressed your feelings in this short and beautiful poem.Well done!
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