So I like someone, and it's fall, so I thought, why not write about the both of them! This is my first draft, so criticism is greatly appreciated.
Hello midnightdreary! Kara here for a (hopefully) quick review!Give me your soul.With that aside, I'm not the best at poetry but here we go!Bold = grammar and flow issues.Italics = suggestions and overallStrikethrough = removeUnderline = krazy Kara komments.
Ugh also I just noticed that I wrote "in the table", not "on the table" smh. Yeah please call out any spelling/grammar mistakes.
Wow, such a beautiful language used in this piece! I am a sucker for imagery, so this has definitely piqued my interest. I love the description of the "coming season," comparing the autumn leaves to fire. For a first draft there is definitely not a lot I would change. Well done, indeed! The only thing I have to say is the quote "The trees are taking their final stand against the cold, starting fires before it snows." It's very beautiful, but I did have to a double-take in that section to make sense of it. Do you mean to say that the trees are trying to keep their last leaves on the branches? If so, does the "starting fires" part refer to the vividly orange leaves still falling into the snow? I'm personally not too sure, but I might just re-think that part if you decide to write anymore drafts.Otherwise, this is great!! Keep up the amazing work, and I look forward to seeing more from you ^^-Lisbeth
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