Some days I don’t feel anything
As if my body has thrown out my heart
I eat, I breathe, I sleep
Rinse and repeat
On those days, Isolation grabs my hands and doesn’t let go
It pulls me into bed and places the covers over me
“Rest, you need rest.”
So I rest, hoping that my heart will return to me
When it comes, it comes violently
As if all those unfeeling days have decided to make themselves known
Before, I couldn’t find my tears, now they refuse to stop
Isolation wipes my tears, “You need this.”
The hole in my heart is somehow the heaviest weight
I sink into every place I sit, lay, and stand
My home remembers me, it cares for me, it won’t leave me
Isolation reminds me that outsiders do not have that guarantee
One day, I decide to leave
As I reach for the doorknob,
Isolation yanks me by my wrist
The welcome mat slowly fading from my view
“They won’t care for you like me.
There’s nothing out there that isn’t here.
The things outside won’t help you, won’t make you happy.”
And as always, I realize Isolation is right
Isolation jabs pitchforks and warning signs on the lawn
It glides over and whispers in my ear,
“For protection.”
I believe it, the outside world has never been kind to me
Who will keep me safe like my Isolation
“I’m lonely,” I murmur
“No, you’re happy, you prefer this.”
It’s safe where we live
No changes and I like it this way
I like it this way
Hey its Caite swinging on by with a review. First of all I just want to say this is incredible. I want hundred percent felt like I was in the moment with you. I love how you use personification with the feeling of isolation. This piece left me in awe. Your writing is absolutely stunning. I love this!!!! I hope you have a fantastic day or night.
Good morning, afternoon, evening, night, or whatever applies to you in your respective time zone. Anyway, onto the review. This was a very powerful poem. It questions what loneliness truly is, as well as pointing out the difference between being lonely, and being alone. This poem allows the reader to relate, even if they don’t have any experience in the topic you’re describing.
“I’m lonely,” I murmur
“No, you’re happy, you prefer this.”
It’s safe where we live
No changes and I like it this way
I like it this way
I absolutely love this poem!! It's very beautifully and poetically written but at the same time doesn't hold back from being brutally real and honest. Your writing style is lovely, and this personaification of the fickleness of Isolation and the emotions it evokes is fantastic. My favourite line is, "When it comes, it comes violently," because it holds so true and perfectly encapsulates the poem. With this simple phrase you've described the experience of every person who has gone through this (myself included). Overall, fantastic!! I have no critiques. Keep writing 
hello midnight786! Nicole here with a short review.
first off: W O W this is an amazing, but also a very sad poem. I really like the way it flows. and the topic was very interesting, how you want to leave isolation, but it also draws you back in. I like that you made ''isolation'' a talking character.
I also really love the way it ends.
“I’m lonely,” I murmur
“No, you’re happy, you prefer this.”
It’s safe where we live
No changes and I like it this way
I like it this way
Hi, and good morning/ afternoon/ evening/ night/ or whatever it is in your corner of the world! Wren here for a little review!
First impression: this is an amazing poem! It really resonates with me and it is written really well!
This. I feel this. You really capture what it feels like to not feel. It may have been clearer if you had written “I eat, breathe, sleep” instead, but it’s just personal preference!Some days I don’t feel anything
As if my body has thrown out my heart
I eat, I breathe, I sleep
Rinse and repeat
Yes, just the lies we’re told to keep us trapped in ourselves.“They won’t care for you like me.
There’s nothing out there that isn’t here.
The things outside won’t help you, won’t make you happy.”
I really like this last sentence, it sounds like the writer is trying to convince themselves!I like it this way
Hey, IMK here.
I'm here to review what looks like a rollercoaster of a poem, and I'm really excited for it!
I hope you enjoy YWS!
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"I eat, I breathe, I sleep
Rinse and repeat"
this is me but add swim practice and school lmao
In all seriousness, I think this is a really interesting line, and it has a lot of muted feelings. I don't really know how to explain it, but it's like there's no emotion and it's completely apathetic, but also behind the wall of apathy, there is crying, wailing, whatever you want to call it, it's there, and it's tired. It's exhausted and has no more strength to do anything but eat, breathe, and sleep.
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"On those days, Isolation grabs my hands and doesn’t let go
It pulls me into bed and places the covers over me
“Rest, you need rest.”
So I rest, hoping that my heart will return to me"
First things first. I really love the use of a concept as a character (I do it pretty often myself).
My thoughts on your portrayal of the character Isolation is like a greedy yet kind person (thing? emotion? concept?) who wants the best for you, but also has this loneliness (greediness), wanting you to stay despite knowing that being alone, while good for you, could be damaging.
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I really love your poem, and there are so many more things that I could talk about for hours, I just want to sit and reread this over and over, and i know i wont get much more done.
Ill probably come back and write the rest of the review in the next couple days, so look forward to that!
Have a great day!
- IMK
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