Roses (Roman x gender neutral reader)
It was Roman's first date with you. He waited patiently outside of your door for you to come outside.
"Please don't tell me that they forgot..." The Creative Side mumbled.
But you heard the side. "One moment, my prince! I'm just finishing up something!"
You weren't lying, you had gotten him a bouquet and were wrapping a ribbon around the rose stems. "He'll love it, I know it!" You weren't usually this confident, but Roman... He brought out something different in you. He made you feel oh so special, and he cared about you. He loved you. And that was all you could ever want. He was handsome, and charming, and brave, and-
"Darling, are you alright in there?" Roman's voice pulled you from your thoughts. You could only smile.
You exited your room, flowers in hand.
The prince looked surprised, and you noticed something behind his back.
"Well, this is awkward." He nervously laughed, handing you a bouquet of red, white, and soft yellow roses.
"For... me?" You softly asked, your face going red.
He nodded and took your hand. "Thank you, my love." He smiled. That beautiful smile... This is who you fell in love with.
You didn't realize what you did in that moment until your lips were pressed against his. Those soft lips, touched with the taste of raspberry and cherry... sweet, soft, handsome...
And he was all yours. All yours....
He kissed back, but eventually pulled away. "Shall we go to our date, my flower~?" He smirked.
"We shall, my prince~."
You kissed him again, and went off on your way with the prince of your dreams.
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Okay so I'm a sucker for Sanders Sides, and when I saw this was in the Green Room, I had to check it out. First off, I love how short but sweet it is. There were only a few things that I wanted to point out!
The thing I'd say about this is that this form of a stutter is used a lot. That's not to say it's bad, but I'd recommend also trying some different forms. For example, you could say, "For... for me?" Which conveys the same pause but gives a different feel.
The only other thing I'd say that I couldn't really get out of my head is that Thomas is gay completely, as are his sides, so I know that you wrote this for a gender-neutral reader, but you could consider adding some more masculine pet names or just references since it can be assumed that if someone knows and is reading a Sanders Sides fiction, then they know Thomas is gay.
Those are the only things I really had to say. Overall, this was amazing, and it definitely left me with a smile : )
thank you! Also, I wanted to point out that I used gender neutral terms because this was for the reader, and not for a male character specifically... I'm not sure if the person reading is male, female, or has a gender at all, haha... I'll add that pause, thank you!!!
p.s: You really thought it was amazing??? awww!!!
No problem! Also, yeah I completely understand.
Ps: yep, it is amazing! %u2764%uFE0F
^ that was supposed to be a heart so I don%u2019t know why it did all those symbols, haha. <3 there we go
sushshsh XD ok
...you simp, you did this on purpose xD /lh
In all honesty, I really liked this! It had a nice flow to it, and the descriptions were nice as well.
I have no idea why, but I really loved this line right here in particular. It shows how lucky the reader is to have fallen in love with Roman.
One little nitpick I have is this line right here.
As much as I like the flow and descriptions, I feel like it was a bit much. If you could size it down a little, it would work a little nicer, in my opinion.
Overall, I really enjoyed this! Keep up the great work!
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1) shhhh
2) thank you uwu
3) hehe
4) hm... I'll try to fix that, thank you!
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It's no problem! Just trying to give you a bit of constructive criticism to help you out uwu ...I'm sounding like Judex, aren't I xD
ok Judex and Roman kinnie XD