EverLight here with a review! This review is not intended to offend or hurt you or make your novel or poem seem bad, but be warned you may feel offended anyway
First Impression
Okay...I can actually here that song for myself. This was brilliant.
Nitpicks & Grammar
Nothing Here
Style & Flow
Just one thing-you use atop twice-
top a slick, shiny boulder perched an eerily enticing entity staring at the soft waves.
Wonderfully white and brilliantly blue water ruthlessly beat against the barren, rocky beach.
The tired temptress’ turquoise eyes sparkled slightly in the sun.
Motion on the horizon catches the creature’s eye as she smiles slyly.
Ah! a boat, a boat bearing an ominous flag sailing silently across the ever-changing sea.
Rotting wood creaked as the craft swayed side to side softly lulling its passengers into a serene slumber.
Black sails swing silently slowly pulling the vessel past the forgotten island.
Atop a slick, shiny boulder perched an eerily enticing entity stilly staring at the soft waves.
I'd recommend finding a different word besides atop the secant time.
Other then that you did an amazing job!!!!
EverLight Out
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