Young Writers Society

It flows rather well, I think. This is better than most things I find on the site, especially since MOST of the rhymes aren't forced. Sure, there are a few missteps, places where you sacrifice rhythm for rhyme (example: "That dress is too long, I swear I won't get it wrong", the rhythm is slightly broken there, because the second line is too long, in my opinion), but it is rather well-written overall.

Now, because it's a good piece, it pains me so much more that I cannot agree with its message. I won't mix my personal political views into the review, but the content is also important. However, know that it does not affect its quality in any significant way, at least not for me.

So, to summarize, it's very well written, the rhymes work, the topic isn't a classic breakup story (and good God have there been so many of those), and other than a few mistakes here and there, I cannot find any significant flaws. I don't agree with its message, but I can overlook that in favor of the poem's raw quality.

Good work!

Wow, this was certainly interesting. I love how it rhymes. I don't find many poems like that so well done. Any way, I like the message in this, although I would say it's very feminist. However I like it. I love how you just went on and said what you needed to say. I actually have no critique for this because I found it just beautiful. Just make sure you don't come off as sexist because at times it does seem like you are being a bit bitter. However I liked this and hope to read more from you.