Young Writers Society

Hey mazerette,

Shady here with a review for you this fine day!

This is a really interesting piece. I don't have OCD, but it's very informative and eye-opening. I know a bit about OCD beyond the ridiculous stereotypes portrayed in media, but not the other bits you mentioned -- especially the part about rape. That one didn't make sense to me, and if it actually happened to you then I urge you to tell someone -- OCD or not, that is not an okay thing to have happen to you, and the monster who attacked you shouldn't get off without punishment.

Referring to the piece itself, however, I suggest you split it up into paragraphs. It's fairly short, so I decided to go ahead and read it -- but if it was a longer piece, then just one big chunk of text is intimidating. Breaking written works into paragraphs makes it easier for our minds to process what's being said.

Stylistically, I don't have any critiques. Your spelling and grammar seem fairly perfect, and your ideas are interesting and well-written. I am curious what the purpose of it is, though? Just getting your thoughts out, or for an essay, or...?

Anyhow, I'll end this here because I don't really have helpful suggestions beyond this.

Keep writing!

~Shady

Radrook here top provide a review. Please note that I try to help and not offend. However if by any chance I dio offend, you have my apologies beforehand for that indiscretion. The composition focuses on OCD and very graphically describes how it drastically affects the victim. It also describes how people can misunderstabnd the symptoms.

OCD can definitely incapacitate a person by interfering with the person’s social interactions withy his environment and with others on a social basis. A person preoccupied with intense concerns can’t be expected to excel at tasks that require unwavering concentration. The obsessive thoughts will tend to short-circuit the concentration causing the person to have to start again or take up where he left off.

That’s like taking three steps forward and one backwards over and over. The frustration involved is indeed traumatic and definitely no laughing matter. Unfortunately, the untrained or ignorant simply dismiss such behavior under the generic category if crazy. Others, such as the one described in the composition might just say it it a personality quirk typical of a certain age. It is understandable that such a reaction is frustrating to the sufferer. It also prevents those in charge of a minor from getting hin or her the required medical help. Such help can be in the form of medication which restores certain chemical imbalances and prevents obsessive thoughts from recurring.

Kinds of Medications that might Help OCD
https://iocdf.org/about-ocd/treatment/meds/

Thanks for writing this composition in order to help dispell the misunderstandings.

Suggestion:

The use of paragaphs and othe spacings would greatrly improve readability. Otherwise the block of text on the page is intimidating and discourages a reading.