Published December 9, 2011
have you ever felt so alone
that you have nothing to hold
and no one home? i cant stand this pain
are you ganna yell at me the whole way
i just want to escape i don't really care of anything
i just want you to know that i still love you but i hate the pain you put me thru
all i want is you again with out all the hits I take
my dad is gone
my momma hates me
but i know that my angel will always love me.....
HEY EVERYONE! THIS IS A SONG I'm WRITING 
NOT THAT GREAT BUT IT'S A WORK IN PROGRESS!
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I like this, it has a great rhythm to it, I could hear it in my head. I would love to see the whole song once you finish it. Please do PM me.
Keep writing
~Anshita
I definitely do like this. It has a sense of purpose, like it could be one of those songs that has you thinking well after the ipod is put away. I think that the reason for that might be because its on a topic we can all identify with. It does have some minor grammatical things, like ganna. But those are simple. I think you could go a lot of good places with this!! <3