I honestly love this writing. It is truly amazing how you used just a few words to/ create such a strong emotion. I love that this poem is short and sweet, to the point; however I think you can do a lot more with this. Maybe experiment trying to make it longer and keep telling to story. I look forward to reading more of your work!
Hi! I'm stopping by for a quick review! So I really do like the message this poem is portraying. I think its a very strong metaphor that you wove into 3 lines so easily. I do wish there was more to the poem, but I think its so powerful in just those 3 lines, that there doesn't need to be anymore.My one suggestion would be to adjust the flow. Specifically in the first two lines. " You used me like a""Serial killer uses a knife."The pause between the a, and the serial killer part seemed a bit off to me. I wish it flowed a bit better. Ok so I hoped this helped a bit! I loved the metaphor and the poem in general. Keep up the good work! Can't wait to read more of your poems!-E
Hello!I really like this. I think the metaphor when combined with the title presents a real depth of thought in just three short lines. It doesn't feel like a poem; it strikes me as a quote - which I think is really effective as it becomes close and personal in its targeted (first-person indirect speech) accusation. Here the subject of the poem states that they were used "like a serial killer uses a knife", this immediately has large implications for the subject's complicity in an action they consider disgusting. The rhetorical question posed in the title then has renewed meaning: if the subject was the knife that caused the injury then can they really be the victim? Indeed, "who is the victim?" This quite slippery thought process is drawn to a neat, but still imperfect conclusion with the line "you didn't just hurt me" - this suggests a corruption perhaps beyond personal pain, a pain which was inflicted on others or on a spiritual aspect of the subject's being.I love it! Although, I'm a little biased in this sense as I adore anything cryptic, especially if I feel like I've cracked it (which in this case I don't think quite have). The only thing I can offer in terms of being constructive is: be careful not to lose your meaning to purposeful ambiguity. I don't think you have here at all, as it is widely applicable to many contexts, but all the same it's something to be wary of and Its certainly something I personally am culprit of.
(Ooh, I'm gonna review this.)Hello! Irid here with a review.I will apologize in advance, considering I haven't reviewed or wrote something in a while.So there isn't much to read in this poem, but that's still okay. Nevertheless, I really like this! I love a lot of the poems that come from you. Because of the length of this, this most likely will be a short review.As I said, I really like this. Although, my one question is "what isn't the context of the poem?" Is it from a relationship, is it from a friendship, a family member? How did they use you? Are they using you to hurt other people? I'm not sure myself, but I kind of like that aspect. This poem could be open to interpretation and the reader could fill in the blanks, which in a poem, I enjoy.Overall, great work! I like the shortness of it. I like everything about it. I honestly can't wait to read more from you! Thanks for the read!-Iridescence
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