okay you've made me cry. i am drowning my sorrows in poems and reviewing because i love them and i spend all my time reading YWS poems and it's just really rewarding.
it's nearly eleven thirty p.m. and i'm on my bed with my heated blanket knowing i should sleep but i just made 11 Christmas cards to hand out tomorrow plus more on the way, but my creativity came to mind and if i could i would send you a christmas card handmade because you are amazing and beautiful and talented and i love being privileged to be your friend. also, my kitty grizzabelle is black and small and soft and fluffy, and she just jumped up on my bed and started kneading and is now digging her claws affectionately into my skin and laying on my chest with blankets and purring loudly. this is what you would be like as a cat, i can tell.
i am totally going to be a crazy cat lady someday.
you should be too.
aside from that i am seriously in love with your gift and style and talent in writing. it's utterly amazing and beautiful. i see that you post a new work and i get chills reading it. i look over and scan your list of creative titles - regardless of if ive read all of them or remember them from my bookmarked pages on the internet browser - and i love how you can twist a person's emotions in all the right ways.
so, the poem. i came to write a review and i have only nineteen poems to read over tonight and review but i still have more to say.
your first three stanzas end in "me", which is fine. the word isnt emphasized boldly, and the repetitious end phrasing does not confuse or interrupt readers. i think it is absolutely fine how you wrote it. i skimmed the previously posted reviews, because you rarely ask for help on a specific part of your poems, and they seem to agree.
my favourite lines would have to be:
"i lost my voice before the trees lost their leaves" (this is so very sad.)
"i'm tired of trying to win love" (RELATABLE UGH.)
"snow blankets the earth" (what a soothing feeling that appeals to the sight and touch.)
"and i'm drunk on the idea of your arms around me" (like that is shakesperian masterpiece right there woman you go girl!)
"there was once a time when being held by someone else was close enough" (so depressing in a beautiful way but i relate to this, awee.)
"the warmth of your skin is so close, and winter these days are so cold" (what a vivid contrast. it really hurts my heart to think about how much meaning is conveyed in this because i feel the same on a personal level.)
i basically love love love love love your entire poem. PLEASE KEEP WRITING i know i beg this all the time but PLEASE KEEP SHARING YOUR EMOTIONAL BEAUTY WRITING WORKS i don't know how i'd live without them AND PLEASE GET YOUR POEMS PUBLISHED YOU DERSERVE TO.
i also adore the style in which you used to write this - the font, spacing, and way of typing this is incredible. with no mistakes, enough emotional tugging to rip my heart apart, and a beautiful mind, your thoughts have once again sent me to wonderland where i can read your poems in awe and love them.
thank you for posting this, thank you so much.
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