Published April 2, 2012
Once there was a fox call, Cindy, who was different from most foxs. She was good and kind to all the inhabitants into the woods. One day as Cindy was walking through the woods, she saw her friend Rachel who was a cat and said to her “A delightful day isn’t it?”
Rachel replied, “Why yes it is a lovely day, how are you Cindy? what are you doing out? I thought you needed to clean up your house.”
Cindy responds with a little laugh, “I am feeling good, and yes, yes I do need to clean up my house but this morning when I opened my cabinets, I saw that I do not have a lot of food, and since it is a pleasant day that I thought I would go to the market, get some food and then clean up my house.”
“Oh that sounds lovely; Do you mind if I join you?” Rachel asks.
“I would love it if you joined me” Cindy replied and so off they went to the market.
When they got to the market, Cindy found out that she had forgotten her list of food she needs to buy and her shoulder bag. As was her habit, she said things cannot get worse but that moment things did get worse. It starts to rain and not light showers, no; it was pouring rain. Everybody ran to get out of the rain.
Cindy said, “Things cannot get worse.”
As you can guess things did worsen. Rachel and Cindy went over to Cindy’s house because it was closer to the market.
"Well, that rain was a big shock, don’t you agree Cindy? The weather was pleasant as the sun shinning, but then it started to rain” Rachel said. That rain was a big shock, don’t you agree Cindy? The weather was pleasant as the sun shinning, but then it started to rain” Rachel said.
“Well, yes it was like every time I say things cannot worsen; things get worse' as Cindy said that they heard a sound. A sound like something was breaking then from under the house; they heard a sound like water going to some-were when Cindy opened the door that went to the basement a big wave of water came up from down-stairs and flooded her house. The wave got everything wet, so wet that when Cindy could go into her house, all of her things could not be use for some time.
Rachel said, "It is okay you can stay with me.”
“Thank you Rachel.” Cindy said, “I do not know that is happing today, everything that can go wrong is going wrong.” Then Rachel had an idea what if Cindy’s dreadful luck was because Cindy was saying things cannot get worse, make her have a lot of awful luck
“That is a good idea Rachel but who make it be bad luck?” Cindy said.
“It possibly that it is the sea god” Rachel said, “Because it is said that he likes to mess with mortals, If it is we will need to go to the sea and talk to him.”
“Then let's go” Cindy replied.
So off they went to talk to the sea god. When they got there the sea god admitted that yes, it was him and said he would not do it once again. They all live happily constantly after and not at any time did things worsened again.
The moral of the story is too never said
things cannot get worse because it is a very good chance they will.
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Not a bad story. I thought it was nice to say that Cindy was different from the other foxes in the respect that she was nicer than all the others but it would have meant more if Rachel was rude or had some negative character flaw or at least meeting with a character who was rude, beside the sea god. Continuing on that, a better word choice would have been optimistic.
I thought the story went on at a nice pace until you brought in the sea god. It abruptly ended the story. I think you could have included some sort of adventure that continued on the idea that things got worse. The second to last line was very confusing to me; I think a line such as, "They all lived in a state of constant happiness after this and never again did things worses for Cindy the Fox.", would have been better suited.
And finally, I did like how you included the moral at the end. I think the word "too" might not have been meant but anyway it provided a nice and fast read for me. And sorry for not attempting to fix grammar; more than likely I would make a mistake.
thank you for your comment and i like that line"They all lived in a state of constant happiness after this and never again did things worses for Cindy the Fox." so i am going to borrow it thanks.