I am a sunken treasure
under the vast, blue sea.
I am a single note
in a celestial melody.
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I'm the pot of gold
at the end of the rainbow.
My mind is a river
in an infinite flow.
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My passion is fire
dancing wildly with mirth.
My affection is the rain,
coming down to kiss the earth.
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My laughter is a poem,
I know by heart.
I see life as a jewel
or a classic piece of art.
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The colors of my thoughts
are in different shades.
My story will leave marks
that will never fade.
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I speak in words
only poets can hear.
I'm in love with adventures,
I know no fear.
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Hi lyricalrebel!!
I really liked what you wrote because there was something which connected me to it.
the title adopted by you was wonderful. i really liked your writing style. The words to express yourself were well chosen too.
I speak in words
only poets can hear.
I'm in love with adventures,
I know no fear.
I would like to mention that these lines were very well written..
In all GREAT IMAGINATION!!
keep writing!!
waiting for more from you..
Hi lyricalrebel, Felistia here with a review for you on this wonderful day.
Theme: I really love this theme and the way you laid it out. Some people may say that it is repetitive, but I like it that way. It has a great flow to it and the rhyming scheme really helps make the poem interesting and flow really well. I feel that you could make this in italics as I think it would make it look more interesting.
Description: You had a wonderful amount of similes in here and I think that is why I like the poem so much. Your opening line was just great. It was full of imagery and was a great hook. If I had to nit-pick about one think, it would be that there could be a little more colour. That is just me though.
Grammar and Punctuation: I think you got the grammar and punctuation spot on.
Small suggestions: My only suggestion is to keep the poem as it is and to just keep writing.
Overall this was a great poem and I look forward to seeing more of your work. Never stop writing and I hope you have a great day\night.
Your friend, Felistia.
Thank you so much. I appreciate your review. X)