Wow!!! I really feel we write our best when we feel what we write. This piece too, however it is, is a masterpiece.
Hey there! Anne here for a review. Okay so first of all, this poem is a bit too relatable to me, more to my past self actually, I didn't like my face at all- it was full of pimples, enlarged nose, not so feminine eyebrows- all I thought was I could be the ugliest of people I know. I even hated my legs, they seemed too muscular to beling to a girl. I have the athletic built you sew, muscles here and there that most girly girls don't have.
It wasa very vulnerable time.
But it was a very small period for me, of which I'm grateful to god. I'm a high schooler now, thanks to the lockdown I was able to change the way I look at these things before they had a chance to get really nasty. Whenever I smile in the mirror now, my imperfections seem to make me perfect, I love how beautiful I feel. Due to incidents happening in my life- I had over exerted my thighs once, so that I couldn't walk or sit comfortably for two long weeks- that I actually began to value my big, fat thighs. I grew comfortable in my skin.. And I hope you would too. For me, now, morales matter more than looks. And I'm grateful to god to give me a not so beautiful face because now when I look at other people, I don't judge them based on their looks. My face taught that to me.
Now coming back to your poem, I will go stanza wise.
i don’t like myself
there’s nothing good about me
everyone always moves on
one way or another
A very emotional starting, but u don't agree with you. I don't even know you personally and just based on this poem I can tell you a lot of good things about yourself.
- you are confident to share your feelings, a lot of people who are idolised by society can't do that.
- you write beautifully, it can only come from a beautiful person.
- from your previous replies, I know you are caring and always willing to give a sympathetic ear,
-you like to take advice
And I'm sure you'll have others as well. If however you still feel the feelings of this poem, I strongly recommend you to go through this link given below.
https://tinybuddha.com/blog/40-reasons- ... reciating/
( please cooperate I dont know how to create the hyperlink )
i don’t like my body
it has no shape
probably due to an eating disorder
that took over everything
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i don’t like my face
the features don’t match
mirrors are my enemy
i wish they would all crack
Since both of these stanzas have been talked before, I wouldn't elaborate that much. But I really loved the personification of the mirror. Really.
i don’t like my personality
i’m much too loud
i speak my mind too often
but nobody seems to hear
There's nothing wrong with speaking your mind. Believe me, I'm not too good at it and sometimes I wish I had the courage!! Sadly enough tho, the last sentence is true. But it would have been true regardless, it's not because you're too loud. Instead we live in a society where no adult really cares about the opinions of the teens. But society will change for good and better, I am hopeful about that because I've witnessed people around me change.
i don’t like my thoughts
they take up too much of my time
it consumes my mind
all the possibilities racing through my head
I have the same problem only difference being that I don't view it as a problem. I talk to myself a lot ,a lot!
But when I think about all the possibilities I think it leads to my personal development more than anything in this world. I wish you could change your mindset here. Because if we stop thinking those things, problem would never end.
For the next stanza I have not much to say except that you don't have to have a talent. You an be extraordinary in a thing you are interested in because you're determined to do good at it. And hard work beats talent when talent fails to work hard.
even though i hate myself
i try my best to please others
the mask comes off at night
i become vulnerable
Wow, this stanza is amazing. Can I just share a quote for this though, ' you can be the sweetest of peaches and still their will be people who are allergic to it'. I love this quote it gives me a new insight. You see, we don't have to please everyone. Having one or two people by your side who accept you as you are, just validates this. I hope you find good friends soon. Besides the fact, that yws users will always stand with you including me.
For the last two stanzas, I think you e done a great job. The ending was just perfect. Everybody leaves, true, but not necessarily in a painful way. Some people leave us to increase Their standard, while some leave us to let US increase our standard. some other still, are loyal to us in the best way possible that separation looks devastating. But life moves on and so shall we...
It was a great poem. I hope you can love yourself now. We are all imperfect but that's the great thing about it. Perfection lies in imperfection.
Did I make the review too long . am sorry
Keep writing because you're good at it... God loves you no matter what and so shall we
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